Re: Provoking America [10/?] Short chapter is short
anonymous
August 13 2010, 07:20:09 UTC
“Alfred!” Arthur exclaimed, shocked, and slightly scared by the homicidal, but so very hurt look in the younger nation’s eyes. “This…this isn’t…” he began, but didn’t even bother finishing the sentence. It was a lie and they both knew it.
“Don’t you dare fucking tell me that this isn’t what it looks like, England.” Alfred shouted, spitting out his name-no, his country name as if it were poisonous. “Who the fuck do you think you are?” he continued. “And really? Russia? You’re so pathetic,” he said, and the pure, unadulterated venom in his voice made Arthur want to cry, because he was right. He was so very right.
“Alfred, I-” he began, but Alfred had already cut him off.
“No. Don’t even start with me!” Alfred said, beyond furious. “I hate you! I hate you!” he said, feeling tears prick at his eyes, but he refused to allow them to fall
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Re: Provoking America [11c/?]
anonymous
August 31 2010, 05:06:12 UTC
AWWWW.
I would have so loved to read or even just get to imagine some Israel/America. Besides, it'd be good for America, I think. More experience, some distance from America, and if/when he and Arthur get together, no "You're a slut and I'm not anything like that" sentiments to breed even more resentment.
Re: confused author!anon
anonymous
August 31 2010, 08:55:43 UTC
S/he was saying that should do it (or should have done it). She thought it be good for him to get some experience and get some distance. She was saying that if Alfred DIDN'T sleep with someone else, he might end feeling like Arthur was a slut for sleeping around while Alfred himself had abstained from doing the same. But if Alfred slept around, too, then he can't logically resent Arthur for doing the same. (Heh, then again, resentment like that isn't logical, so I personally disagree, but that's what the anon above thought, anyway!)
Re: confused author!anon
anonymous
August 31 2010, 09:55:44 UTC
Yeah, you summed it up much better than my hasty comment. (where I forgot to mention, oh yeah, that writer-anon is a really good writer) And yes, the last bit is kind of a weak argument, but I soooo wanted some Israel/America even though the author-anon won't write it, hehe.
*ships Israel/America regardless of fill, so there's my pre-set bias.*
Like anon below said, I am going to enjoy imagining America and Korea hanging out together like bros (I mean, Starcraft 2 just came out! Of course they're going to have marathon gaming sessions, sustained only by instant kimchi noodles, candy, and soda.)
Re: confused author!anon
anonymous
August 31 2010, 10:18:33 UTC
Oh good, I'm glad I understood; it's way too easy to misunderstand when I can't see anyone's faces. OTL Although I don't know if your argument is a weak one, actually! I know some people that would no longer feel the resentment you described once they'd done the same thing, actually, but I also know some that would would still feel resentful even after they'd done the same thing. :'D (Which would suck even worse to me personally, because I'd feel guilty for doing it AND feel like a hypocrite for still resenting another for doing what I did. Emotions aren't just complicated, I guess; they're kind of ironic, too!)
Wait, you ship Israel/America? I've only seen Israel in one fic ever, and I've never seen that ship done. Is there actual fic out there, or does it just not exist
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Re: confused author!anon
anonymous
August 31 2010, 13:46:43 UTC
I'm from the Philippines, where there's a growing Korean population, and all my siblings are ADDICTED to instant kimchi noodles. They buy crates of it at a time, and devour it in much shorter periods than I think possible. They're also all ferocious gamers, so the association suggested itself to me at once.
And it's not so much OC-Israel as just...Real-world America/Israel. America sticking up for Israel against the world, even when maybe they shouldn't. I don't want to get into whether Israel is in the right or America, it's just the whole close allies thing.
Israel was not created in order to disappear-Israel will endure and flourish. It is the child of hope and home of the brave. It can neither be broken by adversity nor demoralized by success. It carries the shield of democracy and it honors the sword of freedom.
We support the security of both Israel and her neighbors...." - President John F. Kennedy
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author!anon again :)
anonymous
August 31 2010, 15:00:35 UTC
first!anon: thank you for your comments! it makes sense now XD but yeah, there won't be America/Other Nation smut here.
Also thanks for the quote by JFK! It was really cool and it made me decide to make Israel a girl :) JFK is my fourth cousin =D
second!anon: thanks for your comments and the help in clarifying <3 "I've only seen Israel in one fic ever" Now you've seen Israel in TWO fics =D
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Oh, anon, you're breaking my heart here. T_T Even though I know things will eventually be okay, this is painfully realistic. Hell, these guys eventually getting together is slightly optimistic, but I know people who have somehow finally gotten together after similar tragic-but-silly jealousy games, so I can still believe it. It's going to be awhile before they can be around each other, though, and quite some time before they actually get together, much less sleep together. Unfortunately. OTL
Although this wasn't completely depressing, really, because I kind of sadistically enjoy the hilarious awkwardness of a meeting without boisterous!America and snarky!England. And with England too subdued to fight with France, and France too worried and unnerved to try to prod England into fighting or grope anyone? That's like 80% of the normal excess noise at any meeting, honestly. I mean, I guess South Korea would make some of the noise, but he's probably not even there. God, the eerie quiet and efficiency is enough to mess with even
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AUTHOR!ANON LOVES YOU, TOO <3
anonymous
August 31 2010, 14:33:57 UTC
Holy Shit. I just had to call my sister into the room and be like LOOK AT THIS COMMENT. because I had to share the sheer awesomeness of this comment with SOMEONE. I didn't let her read it though. Cause she hates the fact that I write fanfic so she certainly doesn't know that I write SMUTTY fanfic. CX
Anyway. Holy shit, anon, I love you. This is probably the most awesome comment I've ever gotten <3
It's going to be awhile before they can be around each other, though, and quite some time before they actually get together, much less sleep together. Unfortunately. OTL
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I mean, though it pains me to admit it, writing present!fluff is way more necessary for the story and the emotional resolution the readers need, but smut-filled omake (even if it's romantic love-making instead of graphic smut!) afterward set in the future where things are okay between them would be really satisfying, too.Okay, so I hope you realize that if it wasn't for your review there would have been no more smut in this fic. I thought that in their present state
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Re: Provoking America [11c/?]
anonymous
August 31 2010, 15:07:49 UTC
First!anon here, from all the way back in the previous part, wanted to say that this part: "He wasn’t what Arthur wanted anyway so why try?
With that thought, he packed the rest of his belongings and with one last backward glance into his room, shut the door behind him before dropping his key card off at the front desk." made tears come into my eyes, and I wanted to cuddle America and wrap him in a blankie and feed him ice cream and cookies and hot chocolate and cream
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Re: Provoking America [11c/?]
anonymous
August 31 2010, 15:13:17 UTC
Hahahahah I didn't read what you replied upthread, and you've already said everything I was trying to drive at, LOL. But anyway, keep being awesome, authoranon! :D
Also those quotes, ahhhhhhh! *waves a little Israeli/America flaglet*
Re: Provoking America [11c/?]
anonymous
August 31 2010, 15:38:00 UTC
Lol, well I'm glad that you like where I'm going with this! I'm going to try and get part 12 up before I leave for college on Sunday :)
I'm also really glad you liked that part <3 out of the whole chapter that was one of the parts I was most proud of so it makes me happy that you noticed it! ^^
I think we should take America for a girls night. We can watch The Princess Bride, When Harry Met Sally and stuff (almost said Love Actually but that's a british movie and it'd probably make him sadder) and we'll get lots of ice cream and eat it right out of the carton <3
Re: Provoking America [11c/?]
anonymous
September 1 2010, 00:58:20 UTC
And then we could do each others' nails and hair and make prank calls. Oh god what I would do to be able to play with Nantucket~
On that note, America getting a complete makeover from one of the more fashionable countries - Italy? Romano, specifically, LOL - sounds like it could be really good therapy for him.
“Don’t you dare fucking tell me that this isn’t what it looks like, England.” Alfred shouted, spitting out his name-no, his country name as if it were poisonous. “Who the fuck do you think you are?” he continued. “And really? Russia? You’re so pathetic,” he said, and the pure, unadulterated venom in his voice made Arthur want to cry, because he was right. He was so very right.
“Alfred, I-” he began, but Alfred had already cut him off.
“No. Don’t even start with me!” Alfred said, beyond furious. “I hate you! I hate you!” he said, feeling tears prick at his eyes, but he refused to allow them to fall ( ... )
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I would have so loved to read or even just get to imagine some Israel/America. Besides, it'd be good for America, I think. More experience, some distance from America, and if/when he and Arthur get together, no "You're a slut and I'm not anything like that" sentiments to breed even more resentment.
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anyway :D thank you for reading and commenting! <333
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*ships Israel/America regardless of fill, so there's my pre-set bias.*
Like anon below said, I am going to enjoy imagining America and Korea hanging out together like bros (I mean, Starcraft 2 just came out! Of course they're going to have marathon gaming sessions, sustained only by instant kimchi noodles, candy, and soda.)
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Wait, you ship Israel/America? I've only seen Israel in one fic ever, and I've never seen that ship done. Is there actual fic out there, or does it just not exist ( ... )
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And it's not so much OC-Israel as just...Real-world America/Israel. America sticking up for Israel against the world, even when maybe they shouldn't. I don't want to get into whether Israel is in the right or America, it's just the whole close allies thing.
Israel was not created in order to disappear-Israel will endure and flourish. It is the child of hope and home of the brave. It can neither be broken by adversity nor demoralized by success. It carries the shield of democracy and it honors the sword of freedom.
We support the security of both Israel and her neighbors...." - President John F. Kennedy ( ... )
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Also thanks for the quote by JFK! It was really cool and it made me decide to make Israel a girl :) JFK is my fourth cousin =D
second!anon: thanks for your comments and the help in clarifying <3 "I've only seen Israel in one fic ever" Now you've seen Israel in TWO fics =D ( ... )
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Hahaha, and I found another quote that would really worry Iggy.
"Israel has always been and must always be America's strongest ally."
George E. Pataki (3-time Governor of New York)
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thank you for the other quote!!!
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Although this wasn't completely depressing, really, because I kind of sadistically enjoy the hilarious awkwardness of a meeting without boisterous!America and snarky!England. And with England too subdued to fight with France, and France too worried and unnerved to try to prod England into fighting or grope anyone? That's like 80% of the normal excess noise at any meeting, honestly. I mean, I guess South Korea would make some of the noise, but he's probably not even there. God, the eerie quiet and efficiency is enough to mess with even ( ... )
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Anyway. Holy shit, anon, I love you. This is probably the most awesome comment I've ever gotten <3
It's going to be awhile before they can be around each other, though, and quite some time before they actually get together, much less sleep together. Unfortunately. OTL
and
I mean, though it pains me to admit it, writing present!fluff is way more necessary for the story and the emotional resolution the readers need, but smut-filled omake (even if it's romantic love-making instead of graphic smut!) afterward set in the future where things are okay between them would be really satisfying, too.Okay, so I hope you realize that if it wasn't for your review there would have been no more smut in this fic. I thought that in their present state ( ... )
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With that thought, he packed the rest of his belongings and with one last backward glance into his room, shut the door behind him before dropping his key card off at the front desk." made tears come into my eyes, and I wanted to cuddle America and wrap him in a blankie and feed him ice cream and cookies and hot chocolate and cream ( ... )
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Also those quotes, ahhhhhhh! *waves a little Israeli/America flaglet*
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I'm also really glad you liked that part <3 out of the whole chapter that was one of the parts I was most proud of so it makes me happy that you noticed it! ^^
I think we should take America for a girls night. We can watch The Princess Bride, When Harry Met Sally and stuff (almost said Love Actually but that's a british movie and it'd probably make him sadder) and we'll get lots of ice cream and eat it right out of the carton <3
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On that note, America getting a complete makeover from one of the more fashionable countries - Italy? Romano, specifically, LOL - sounds like it could be really good therapy for him.
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