USUK -Constrction worker AU
anonymous
August 15 2010, 15:49:00 UTC
Gosh I hope I did this right...If I didn't do this right my bad... . Alright, I want the pairing in that order, Arthur is anonymous BL writer, a famous one at that. He's on extreme writers bock, and I don't care for the reason, bu he break something. He calls a company to fix it and what he's met with is a very openly gay Construction worker!Alfred. They reeally click and Arthur finally finds some material in Alfred, and starts to break things on purpose.
Bonus: - Arthur is a VIRGIN writer - Matthew is his Assistant for his BL novels -Smut please, Artie does need matiral after all!!!
Re: Fix That Will You [2NOTES/?]
anonymous
August 25 2010, 01:51:55 UTC
but it's not just porn he's publishing - it's porn with PLOT and CHARACTERIZATION! That makes it a LITERARY ART FORM! So of COURSE he'd use his real name, a-ha-ha-ha!
...that's the sound of me justifying my own desire to get published one day when all I write is pronzy fanfics.
Re: Fix That Will You [2NOTES/?]
anonymous
August 25 2010, 04:57:20 UTC
Hey, anon, I hope you won't mind some concrit? I really like this story- you have some really good ideas (like the popularity of the Kirkland books)- but you have a few mistakes that throw me out of the story a bit. Also, due to the nature of these mistakes, I'm pretty sure I read another one of your fills recently, which was also pretty awesome, but had the same problems.
You have a few minor grammar problems, but more glaring are the colloquialisms aren't quite correct. A couple of examples:
"It’s like the right of passage." --> It's like a rite of passage- as in, a ritual of sorts.
"Yes, well their all the first published" --> Yes, well, they're all first editionsPossibly the most distracting problem is your constant changing of tenses. Some is in present tense, others are in past tense, and you switch between the two much too often. You seem to want to write this fill in present tense, so try to watch out for the verbs that slip by in past tense
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Oh my England, this was absolutely amazing~! I throughtly enjoyed it, and I don't mind Frananda~!(OP lieks Franada, and simply adores, Franada + Alfred moments~!) This was great and I cant wiat for the instalment!!!
Fix That Will You [3a/?]
anonymous
August 26 2010, 22:12:44 UTC
Sorry about the grammar, I caught myself doing it right after I posted. Don't worry I don't really mind the corrections, they'll help me not make the mistake in the future. 'Side's I'm not usually very good at grammar to start with, but I think I should be better, I really cracked down on myself. Curse you tenses!Alfred showed up thirty minutes after eight, apologizing, with some weirdness, for the fact. Turned out, traffic had not wanted to be on his side and be its usual normal speed. Arthur just rolled his green eyes and let the American come in
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Re: Fix That Will You [3b/?]
anonymous
August 26 2010, 22:17:04 UTC
“Oh, it’s actually very funny.” Francis chuckled out before there is the sound of him yawning. “Oh, it can’t be that bad, maybe something in that perverted head of yours will produce a number one best seller.”
“Perverted he-You’re the one with the perverted head, Frog!” Arthur raged as Francis wished a goodbye under it and hung up. This of course only caused the blonde Englishman to rage more. Peter giggled from the living room as the phone was placed back on the receiver. Arthur glared, causing the boy to shut his mouth. “What do you plan on doing today
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Re: Fix That Will You [3b/?]
anonymous
August 26 2010, 22:22:43 UTC
Arthur ended up taking up Alfred’s offer to paint his wall. It was that Thursday after and Alfred just smiled before he happily went back to his work at hand. Peter called a friend and was gone by lunch, but Arthur didn’t care because for once he had something solid to focus on
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Re: Fix That Will You [3NOTES/?]
anonymous
August 29 2010, 01:29:03 UTC
I'm definitely interested! I hope more will be coming soon? :D I love Alfred's personality...so easy-going and awesome. He'll finally be the one to get past Arthur's tsundre-ness, I know it!
Fix That Will You [4a/?]
anonymous
September 4 2010, 14:38:08 UTC
Sorry for the rather long update. School and homework have been keeping me from writing...well that and Arthur's writers block. Any way...I have a little something in this chapter“Don’t do anything dangerous!” Arthur snapped at the brownish haired man in front of him sternly. Extended family or not, Wylie was not going to get away with anything if it were so much as scratch to Peter’s knees
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Fix That Will You [4b/?]
anonymous
September 4 2010, 14:42:26 UTC
Alfred laughed, “Matthew is really good at copying you,” that cause Arthur to blink. Alfred knew Matthew…okay well if he knew Francis then he might know Matthew depending on how good of a friend he is with the Frenchman
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Fix That Will You [4c/?]
anonymous
September 4 2010, 14:45:31 UTC
“Tease,” Arthur mutters, turning back to the computer (when had Alfred turned his chair), and pushing the screen up. He let’s his fingers relax on the keys. Slowly he replays the scene in his mind, slowly making the memory turning into words that would make anyone want to storm after Alfred and kiss him because they needed to now. Let the words flow into actions of his fingers
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Re: Fix That Will You [4NOTES/?]
anonymous
September 4 2010, 14:52:28 UTC
I swear one of these days I'm going to do the character limit in.
Okay, again I apologize for the rather long update. It would be a bit longer but I was like "I can't live with the guilt any more!" -posts- >:D
Wylie is my human name for Australia...I figured he would be cute with Peter, and an amazing Zookeeper! So Wylie takes Peter to work so Arthur can work.
Finally a bit of hotness but no porn...in fact I'm eight chapters in and there still isn't any that's like...out there...so...anyone have an idea of how to get them together? I trying to make it meet up with my ending...AHHH!!!!
OP is like....*Combusts*
anonymous
September 5 2010, 01:27:42 UTC
Ah, so lovely~!
*Holds out ring* Marry me? For I love you. Bare my children please.
Ahem anyway~! No need to apologize, for my own school work has made me miss Reviewing the previous chapter! The kiss in this chapter.. FFFFFFFFF, yes. Yes YEs. YES~!
And I'm sure you'll find out what to do darling!
OP is out~! Porn, Kinks, and Nosebleeds until the next update~!
. Alright, I want the pairing in that order, Arthur is anonymous BL writer, a famous one at that. He's on extreme writers bock, and I don't care for the reason, bu he break something. He calls a company to fix it and what he's met with is a very openly gay Construction worker!Alfred. They reeally click and Arthur finally finds some material in Alfred, and starts to break things on purpose.
Bonus:
- Arthur is a VIRGIN writer
- Matthew is his Assistant for his BL novels
-Smut please, Artie does need matiral after all!!!
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...that's the sound of me justifying my own desire to get published one day when all I write is pronzy fanfics.
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I picture Gil trying to get Al a date with Arthur too LOL and baww, Alfred, why so cute? Arthur being his favourite author and everything.
This anon loves you for including Franada, and even better, Franada + Alfred, I'll never get tired of those family moments.
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You have a few minor grammar problems, but more glaring are the colloquialisms aren't quite correct. A couple of examples:
"It’s like the right of passage."
--> It's like a rite of passage- as in, a ritual of sorts.
"Yes, well their all the first published"
--> Yes, well, they're all first editionsPossibly the most distracting problem is your constant changing of tenses. Some is in present tense, others are in past tense, and you switch between the two much too often. You seem to want to write this fill in present tense, so try to watch out for the verbs that slip by in past tense ( ... )
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Okay, again I apologize for the rather long update. It would be a bit longer but I was like "I can't live with the guilt any more!" -posts- >:D
Wylie is my human name for Australia...I figured he would be cute with Peter, and an amazing Zookeeper! So Wylie takes Peter to work so Arthur can work.
Finally a bit of hotness but no porn...in fact I'm eight chapters in and there still isn't any that's like...out there...so...anyone have an idea of how to get them together? I trying to make it meet up with my ending...AHHH!!!!
Alfred will be back soon enough.
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*Holds out ring* Marry me? For I love you. Bare my children please.
Ahem anyway~! No need to apologize, for my own school work has made me miss Reviewing the previous chapter! The kiss in this chapter.. FFFFFFFFF, yes. Yes YEs. YES~!
And I'm sure you'll find out what to do darling!
OP is out~! Porn, Kinks, and Nosebleeds until the next update~!
P.S: Wylie is the shit. Just sayin~!
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