(Second Fill) XXII 1/?
anonymous
October 28 2010, 01:49:47 UTC
Second filler here, OP!Anon. I'm sorry for taking so long, but real life had hit me like 18-weel truck and I'm just coming back to life. I'm posting the first part of this fic and I'll post the rest asap. I hope you enjoy it! All feedback is welcome.
Notes: The title is a reference to Shakespeare's Sonnets, in this case the number 22, dedicated to the "Fair Youth". Yes, I know, I'm dazzlingly original. Anyway, this the sonnet: http://www.shakespeare-online.com/sonnets/22.html
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‘He wants this.’
‘He wants this. This. Me.’
England could not think of anything else as he kissed America’s sweet mouth and let his hands roam over the tanned chest. ‘He’s just a boy’, part of his mind insisted. ‘He wants it’, another part protested. And sure enough, Alfred let out a deep, breathless moan when England’s hand brushed over his nipple. That was all England needed to make up his mind. He leaned forward and deepened the kiss, his
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He rubbed the boy’s body making him groan and moan, pant and sigh, his not-yet-adult voice filling the void of England’s bedroom, tiny “England” and “Arthur” and “yes” falling from his pink lips. Arthur parted America’s ass cheeks, one long finger sliding over the cleft, fluttering touches teasing the small entrance, the oil easing his caresses. America arched back and moaned, long and loud, making England’s cock throb in his trousers
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Oh, anon, this is wonderful. It made my mouth water. I like the way America responds, even when he's so young, and damn, I love England's thoughts about him, a mix of love and posessiveness. This particular passage stood out to me, because it's beautiful but also haunting:
He loved him so much, his wonderful boy, his brilliant child, so strong, so brave, made of grass and wheat and freedom. He wanted America. He wanted to his world, his master, his lover, the first and only one, sweet, darling America, pliant body and eyes as blue as the skies. Alfred, beloved Alfred of the earnest laugh and unbeatable enthusiasm. So different from himself but also so similar, flesh of his flesh, home for his people, for him, by him, but so unique, so happy, so fresh. I also enjoyed that America was the one to initiate everything! It really doesn't fit for him to be a whiny victim at all, even so young. It's really fascinating to see an adult blowing a shota, usually it's the other way around, but the way England focuses on America's pleasure to make
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Author!Anon
anonymous
October 29 2010, 19:36:34 UTC
Oh, thank you!! I'm blushing here. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this part. As we speak (write?) I'm typing the second part, so it'll be up soon.
I'm glad that you liked my take on England's feelings. I really think that he's both master and victim of his love for America. That's why I included England giving America a blowjob: he wants to believe that this is, on some level, an equal relationship.
I ship USUK and FrUk too, tbh. I was surprised to see the age difference between France and England when I first read the strips. And I know that, no matter how much I love him, France is not exactly cautious/appropriate when it comes to expressing his urges which is why I think that France taking advantage of England is not a stretch of the imagination.
Thank you for the lovely comment, OP. I'll go back to typing :D
I really think that he's both master and victim of his love for America. That's why I included England giving America a blowjob: he wants to believe that this is, on some level, an equal relationship.
Oh, wow, I really liked the way you worded this. It has layers, and I love it. I wouldn't mind if you deviate a little from the request or take a longer turn to see more of this.
It's so nice to see USUK shippers that also like FrUK nowadays...it used to be so rare! Their age gap also surprised me, but then again, I love the period of girly France taking care of Chibirisu...and yes, I agree that thinking that France could take a wrong way to express his affections isn't hard to imagine, though I wouldn't exactly call it "taking advantage", because at the time, having relations with someone much younger was very normal, and also, France himself was younger than England is here (not to mention my headcanon that France too was also badtouched by Rome...)
You really should post this to the Fills Page, author anon. More people will read
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Thank you! I'm so glad that you like my take on it. The story itself is finish (I had it all written when I started posted but I needed to type it out on my laptop) but I'm planning to expand on this idea. To me, England feels like someone who doesn't know how normal relationships work and is completely head over heels for America while, at the same time, he is his colonial master and someone who enjoys power.
I love both USUK and FrUK. I mean, history allows us to have both of them without much conflict! I love girly France, too. I'm not sure how you feel about the dub but I love their episode together (I'm talking about the one in which England grows his hair).
I agree that "taking advantage" is not the correct expression. And yes on France being badtouched by Rome. I wonder what happened between him and England.
Now that I posted the last part, I'll add this to the fill list :D
Re: XXII 3/3
anonymous
October 30 2010, 18:04:06 UTC
Before America could recover, Arthur flipped him over and forced his ass into the air. Ever so caring when it came to his dear boy, England managed to put several pillows under the colony’s stomach allowing him to slump over them and rest
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Re: XXII 3/3
anonymous
October 30 2010, 22:03:35 UTC
Amazingly hot and deliciously dirty. I love England's conflicting mental state and his perverted possessiveness (what's with the alliteration today, seriously?). Also, shota!US was adorable in his honest love of UK.
Did I also detect some France/shota!UK in thur too? Mmmmmmm...
Re: XXII 3/3
anonymous
November 1 2010, 22:23:48 UTC
Author!anon, this is really, really lovely. Not only is it super hot, but I really like the way you've painted England's frame of mind and the relationship between the two. It's creepy, yet at the same time it's really not. IDK, this is different from most of the England/shota!America fills I've seen, because while England is technically a predator here, there's not really that predatory feeling to it. Or rather, it's that England really does love America (and vice versa), but it's still gotten mixed up. I like that take. I'm not trying to pressure you to write more than this, really, but I'd be interested in seeing how this relationship evolved through the revolution and into the modern day relationship we see in the series. *thoughtful*
UNF, that was SO HOT, seriously. Wow. I like all the little details, like England's care for the boy that he's nevertheless engaging in sexual acts. Like another reviewer said, this feels different from other shota fics, perhaps because England seems as hopelessly infatuated as little America, and also because it's hinted that he went through the same with France before and doesn't really see anything wrong here (and the way he battles between the tender sex he wants to have with his boy and the violent desire and search for his own pleasure he secretly desires....delicious). And damn America, the incounsciously awesome cocktease at the end, so lovely, and innocent and enticing <3
But really, the hottest and most awesome moment in the story was this:
Finally, with one vicious thrust, he felt the head of his cock slide into America’s body making the boy cry out (in pain or pleasure, England wasn’t sure) and clench around his dick. It was too much, too much of everything, too tight, too hot, too slick, too perfect. America cried out
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Author!Anon
anonymous
November 2 2010, 01:30:03 UTC
Oh, OP!Anon, I'm thrilled that I was able to fill this as you wanted it! This (jerking over the partner's ass) is one of my biggest kinks ever, so I was really happy when I saw your prompt. And, in addition, it gave me the chance to explore some of my headcanon, so I am really thankful. I'm so happy my first Hetalia smutty fic is this one!
I agree that England doesn't see the wrongness of his actions because he's used to it. Not only because of his own past with France but also because I feel it was a pretty common occurrence in Europe when he was growing up.
I tried to portray the tension between chaste love/adoration and lust because I can imagine England going trough that so I'm pleased I managed to convey that :D
This was your first smut? I can already predict you're gonna be a hit over here, if this is the first thing you deliver. Thank you for making your way here and choosing my prompt! ^^
I think you're onto something with England. That's why I believe all the Europeans lost their virginity pretty young.
I also share you kink. In case it wasn't apparent by writing the promptXD It surpises me that this particular kink is so uncommon around here, actually
Notes: The title is a reference to Shakespeare's Sonnets, in this case the number 22, dedicated to the "Fair Youth". Yes, I know, I'm dazzlingly original. Anyway, this the sonnet: http://www.shakespeare-online.com/sonnets/22.html
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‘He wants this.’
‘He wants this. This. Me.’
England could not think of anything else as he kissed America’s sweet mouth and let his hands roam over the tanned chest. ‘He’s just a boy’, part of his mind insisted. ‘He wants it’, another part protested. And sure enough, Alfred let out a deep, breathless moan when England’s hand brushed over his nipple. That was all England needed to make up his mind. He leaned forward and deepened the kiss, his ( ... )
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He loved him so much, his wonderful boy, his brilliant child, so strong, so brave, made of grass and wheat and freedom. He wanted America. He wanted to his world, his master, his lover, the first and only one, sweet, darling America, pliant body and eyes as blue as the skies. Alfred, beloved Alfred of the earnest laugh and unbeatable enthusiasm. So different from himself but also so similar, flesh of his flesh, home for his people, for him, by him, but so unique, so happy, so fresh. I also enjoyed that America was the one to initiate everything! It really doesn't fit for him to be a whiny victim at all, even so young. It's really fascinating to see an adult blowing a shota, usually it's the other way around, but the way England focuses on America's pleasure to make ( ... )
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I'm glad that you liked my take on England's feelings. I really think that he's both master and victim of his love for America. That's why I included England giving America a blowjob: he wants to believe that this is, on some level, an equal relationship.
I ship USUK and FrUk too, tbh. I was surprised to see the age difference between France and England when I first read the strips. And I know that, no matter how much I love him, France is not exactly cautious/appropriate when it comes to expressing his urges which is why I think that France taking advantage of England is not a stretch of the imagination.
Thank you for the lovely comment, OP. I'll go back to typing :D
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Oh, wow, I really liked the way you worded this. It has layers, and I love it. I wouldn't mind if you deviate a little from the request or take a longer turn to see more of this.
It's so nice to see USUK shippers that also like FrUK nowadays...it used to be so rare! Their age gap also surprised me, but then again, I love the period of girly France taking care of Chibirisu...and yes, I agree that thinking that France could take a wrong way to express his affections isn't hard to imagine, though I wouldn't exactly call it "taking advantage", because at the time, having relations with someone much younger was very normal, and also, France himself was younger than England is here (not to mention my headcanon that France too was also badtouched by Rome...)
You really should post this to the Fills Page, author anon. More people will read ( ... )
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I love both USUK and FrUK. I mean, history allows us to have both of them without much conflict! I love girly France, too. I'm not sure how you feel about the dub but I love their episode together (I'm talking about the one in which England grows his hair).
I agree that "taking advantage" is not the correct expression. And yes on France being badtouched by Rome. I wonder what happened between him and England.
Now that I posted the last part, I'll add this to the fill list :D
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Did I also detect some France/shota!UK in thur too? Mmmmmmm...
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And yes, there was a reference to France/Shota!England. I can't hide my FrUk love even in my UKUS, lol.
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TL;DR, bookmarking this because you rule. :)
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But really, the hottest and most awesome moment in the story was this:
Finally, with one vicious thrust, he felt the head of his cock slide into America’s body making the boy cry out (in pain or pleasure, England wasn’t sure) and clench around his dick. It was too much, too much of everything, too tight, too hot, too slick, too perfect. America cried out ( ... )
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I agree that England doesn't see the wrongness of his actions because he's used to it. Not only because of his own past with France but also because I feel it was a pretty common occurrence in Europe when he was growing up.
I tried to portray the tension between chaste love/adoration and lust because I can imagine England going trough that so I'm pleased I managed to convey that :D
And yay for your favourite part! ♥
Thank you so much for enjoying it, OP!
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I think you're onto something with England. That's why I believe all the Europeans lost their virginity pretty young.
I also share you kink. In case it wasn't apparent by writing the promptXD
It surpises me that this particular kink is so uncommon around here, actually
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