You Know My Name Part 2
anonymous
November 3 2010, 23:08:22 UTC
"You what?" Arthur gasped, looking up into Alfred's eyes. They were just as bright as ever, just as kind, but there was something in the smile and the husky tone that made him want to hit the man with his briefcase
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You Know My Name Part 3
anonymous
November 4 2010, 00:17:01 UTC
The next several weeks passed with little notice or incident. Alfred followed Arthur like a puppy, hugging him when they stood together, holding his hand when they sat together, talking loudly about food, sports, dismal weather, and whispering things not really worth whispering into his ear. Admittedly, hot breath against his ear made, "D'you wanna get a burger?" a more interesting proposition, but it was still silly
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Re: You Know My Name Part 3
anonymous
November 4 2010, 00:31:45 UTC
Oh wow, what an amazing start! You managed to set up that creepy atmosphere right off the bat, and I was already getting chills before I even finished the first part. Please update soon!!
Re: You Know My Name Part 3
anonymous
November 4 2010, 04:01:51 UTC
I'm totally getting Patrick Bateman vibes from Alfred xDD I love the start. Managed to make Alfred seem slightly off, but not totally obvious :D I really really hope you continue!
You Know My Name Part 5
anonymous
November 4 2010, 19:54:00 UTC
They had been hugging and holding hands for six months when the newspapers began to run headlines reading "Mystery Body Mutilated in Alley," or "Young Woman Slaughtered in Home
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You Know My Name Part 7
anonymous
November 4 2010, 21:26:16 UTC
Arthur sat in his livingroom floor, eyes trained on the television screen. It was seven thirty--there was not usually a news program on at that time--but due to the rapidly falling population
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Re: You Know My Name Part 7
anonymous
November 4 2010, 23:49:12 UTC
I love how even Arthur is aware that there may be dark clouds lurking under Alfred's sunny personality. The writing style seems almost...detached? (I don't know if that's the right word). As if Arthur is passively allowing himself to get sucked in by Alfred's charms, and is fits PERFECTLY. UGH the suspense is killing me, but I'm glad that you updated quickly. I love this fill!
Man, I'm soo late! Forgive me for the REALLY late reply! I read the first update at school on my iTouch but I don't like writing comments on it :/ Its sort of wonky when I try to..
Anyways back to the topic~ I love how you added the dark atmosphere and settings without making it too obvious. And I noticed you got bonus#2 already down! :D
I really love where this is going, because how I see it its just getting darker and darker.. Like a tunnel!
You Know My Name Part 8
anonymous
November 10 2010, 20:26:02 UTC
Arthur woke feeling warm and safe, more so than he could recall feeling since he was a child. He needed to stretch, and upon trying to do so, discovered that he couldn't move
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I love the start. Managed to make Alfred seem slightly off, but not totally obvious :D I really really hope you continue!
I'm just gonna leave this here...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qwicLgOGJOI
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Thank you for that lovely bit of brainfodder, by the way. I love it.
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Anyways back to the topic~ I love how you added the dark atmosphere and settings without making it too obvious. And I noticed you got bonus#2 already down! :D
I really love where this is going, because how I see it its just getting darker and darker.. Like a tunnel!
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Yes, Bonus 2 had been on my mind since I started to write this. I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I hope I can continue to please!
(Gotta be careful of those dark tunnels. Of course, nobody ever turns around once they get inside and realize they forgot to bring a light...)
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