Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.1]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 13:10:05 UTC
…Is…is having 5 author anons ok…;;? …I…I already feel inferior to the other anons but…this has been eating at me…and…and…I’ll hush now. Alfred had known Arthur his whole life. For as long as he could remember, Arthur was there. When they were small, Arthur was taller, that much Alfred could laugh about in reminiscing. Only his height leverage over Alfred had changed, though. Arthur was still pale, still frail for a male. His eyes were the most vivid green Alfred had ever seen; neither emerald nor jade could compare to the brilliant shade. Alfred always found them absolutely entrancing, enough so to distract from the horribly thick eyebrows that Arthur had learned to keep carefully hidden underneath thick, sandy blonde hair. Alfred loved Arthur’s hair; it never cooperated and liked to wisp out in every which direction, despite Arthur’s desperate attempts to tame it. He made up for the disobedient hair by always dressing in sharp, fresh-pressed clothes, usually of a Sunday best type. Always green, but much darker than his eyes; it made
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Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.2]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 13:13:23 UTC
Alfred remembers asking Arthur about his own family; he’d just started kindergarten and had been surprised that his classmates’ parents had all stayed for at least five minutes…Arthur had walked Alfred to his classroom before leaving for his own school-he went to a weird school called ‘boarding’. Alfred had sat himself in the back of the class, nervous and scared as everyone else, not because his parents had left him, no…because his parents hadn’t even bothered to walk with him to the bus stop. When he got home, daddy was out and mommy was still asleep. Arthur was already home, sporting a fresh black eye and tending to a recently stopped bloody nose. It was nothing new; Arthur fought a lot, especially with someone named Antonio and Francis, and occasionally others. Gilbert was the culprit today and just watching how Arthur winced when he worked on pulling the tissue from his nose, watching a fresh trail of blood running down his lip, was enough to make Alfred start crying. Arthur shushed him quickly and the two bolted when they heard
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Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.3]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 13:15:28 UTC
The talk amounted, ultimately, to nothing. No one dared pick on Ivan again and Alfred and Matt were ultimately left alone just for being associated with him; six weeks later it didn’t matter as Ivan moved back to Russia. A week after that, Matt’s family moved back to Canada. Alfred cried from the day Ivan left to a week after Matt left. Alfred had been home sick the day Ivan left, but he’d come to say good bye; the same happened with Matt. The crying made him sicker and Arthur could only sigh and try to take care of him. His father had taken to staying out for weeks at a time, leaving his mother to run two day jobs and a night job for support; Arthur was the only consistency. Arthur was safety that his parents couldn’t provide. It was that single train of thought that helped Alfred get over his sickness; he went back to school, smile bright on his face, despite the hollow sadness he felt without his friends. The teachers only asked about Ivan once-no one mentioned Matt- and then let the subject drop when Alfred said he’d come to say
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Re: Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.3]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 13:25:18 UTC
Interesting, I love how you built up Alfred and Arthur's relationship and I'm wondering if you're going to cause them to 'break-up' like in canon and I'm scared of that slightly.
But I love this, I still don't know which one would be the serial killer (even though I have a sneaky suspicion it's going to be Alfred) but I can definitely see how if one of them was a killer, the other would stick by him because of their relationship.
Was it you who just deanoned? If so, YES! I'm not the only one that happens to!
NotOP by the way even though I am enjoying how many fills this prompt is getting.
Re: Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.3]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 14:46:39 UTC
I too am loving how many fills this prompt is getting! Each one is so unique and it's really amazing how many different interpretations and styles there are.
You did a great job in setting up Alfred's backstory and the last line...oh my gosh! I can't wait to read more.
Re: Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.3]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 16:48:40 UTC
This buildup is rather intense Writer!Anon! This is a very different approach in comparison to the other fills, but I'm liking this just as much. I'm really looking forward to how this does develop into the prompt, Alfred and Arthur are so close in this that I feel that when the prompt does start to show that it will be very dramatic and exciting to read! You have me interested thus far, please update when you have the chance!
Re: Cold and Broken, Hallelujah [Prologue.3]
anonymous
November 10 2010, 17:24:36 UTC
lame-author-anon of KakuRenBo fill loves this! :DDDDD I love how you built this up, the story, Alfred's school life compared to his home life---it's...just brilliant~ Especially his relationship with Arthur, hsdgsavcgdf
I eagerly await for more! Though not really, because I am hooked ;DDDD
Whoooah, amazing background you have there Author!anon 5. Great approach! Really, you didn't throw any obvious hints as too who's the killer in your story but rather just thicken suspcious-atmosphere. I need to know WHO! OTL
Get out of that corner and don't be shy, because I love to read more~ I also agree with the other anon above, I AM enjoying all the fills my prompt's getting ;D
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But I love this, I still don't know which one would be the serial killer (even though I have a sneaky suspicion it's going to be Alfred) but I can definitely see how if one of them was a killer, the other would stick by him because of their relationship.
Was it you who just deanoned? If so, YES! I'm not the only one that happens to!
NotOP by the way even though I am enjoying how many fills this prompt is getting.
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You did a great job in setting up Alfred's backstory and the last line...oh my gosh! I can't wait to read more.
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I eagerly await for more! Though not really, because I am hooked ;DDDD
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Get out of that corner and don't be shy, because I love to read more~
I also agree with the other anon above, I AM enjoying all the fills my prompt's getting ;D
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much love for this. and arthuuuur buhuhu you take care of little alfred ;;
AND IVAN holy shit yes. he is big-boned. i wanna snuggle the little guy
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