Re: Lost Time - Placeholder
anonymous
February 26 2011, 15:30:56 UTC
Yeah, everyone in my house is sick except for me. It must just be that time on year. Thank you for stopping in to let us know whats up. I eagerly await your next update, however until then, I will occupy myself by googling baby names (Ah, for my characters that is ;^^).
Lost Time - [11a/?]
anonymous
March 19 2011, 09:14:22 UTC
*apologizes forever for the wait*This should have been up, like, a week ago, but the computer was in use and yadda yadda Murphy’s Law. There’s something about this chapter that just… bugs me. I don’t even know what it is. Graaah. And uh, suggested song to go with the first segment: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2jR7Ab7fZuw The force of Arthur’s punch sends Great Britain tumbling to the floor. He lands awkwardly on top of his cane and shoots Arthur a glare that quickly morphs into shock and confusion. He recovers himself quickly, however, and resumes his glaring. England glares right back
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Lost Time - [11b/?]
anonymous
March 19 2011, 09:16:20 UTC
“So Colombia died instead?”
“Canada” England stresses the difference. “is perfectly fine, though probably rather worried right now, as his twin brother just vanished.”
“What?” That gets Great Britain’s attention. England can see the pieces as they fall into place. “America, Alfred, he’s here?”
“And dying. Because of what you did.” The part of him that was a pirate and an empire revels in the metaphorical blood those words draw. “Which brings me to why I’m here. I need to figure out how to get him home before he dies.” Great Britain doesn’t respond. “If you refuse to help me, he’ll die. And you’ll have killed him again.”
“You’re lying. You have to be lying. There is no way that Alfred is…”
“Oh for- I’m not- I’m here. Why is it so hard for you to accept that Alfred is, too?!” Arthur is losing hope, fast. He just doesn’t know how in the world he’s supposed to convince someone who won’t even believe himself.
“It is true, Britain.” Says a quiet voice. From the bushes, a cluster of little fae emerge.
Re: Lost Time - [11c/?]
anonymous
March 20 2011, 05:32:13 UTC
Yay! Thanks for the long-awaited update, authornon! Not saying that you should rush anything, of course. I'm just glad that you updated. :D
Great to see that things are progressing and things seem to be a lot more positive now... Great Britain actually agreed to cooperate, and you've got the humour at the end of this. Lovely stuff.
I hope GB hasn't got anything up his sleeves, though. I'm thinking he's definitely neurotic enough to pull something at the last minute, but I'm hoping he won't. O_O
Thanks again for the awesome update and keep up the good work! I'll be eagerly waiting for more. :D
Re: Lost Time - [11c/?]
anonymous
March 20 2011, 10:09:15 UTC
Just happy you're back, anon. :)
Overall, good chapter! I love your Kumajirou, and Columbia's habit of hiding information from Alfred is going to get him into trouble at some point, isn't it? XD
Crit in white, feel free to ignore - this is your story!: Great Britain going from denial-of-his-actions to capitulation seemed a little rushed - after two hundred years of being a bitter old man, I feel like he should either a) have had a bit of a clue bat taken to him pre-story (so less certain of his actions, though convinced of his intentions), and/or b) taken longer to agree to help Arthur (maybe he'd stall until he gets a promise to see Alfred "again," or been more surprised when the good fae reappeared to him). Not to say that he can't be a stubborn old coot, or that he wouldn't still be blind to many of the consequences of his actions, but the scene was pretty, hm, mercurial. If you decide to change it in de-anon - which is totally up to you! - it would be pretty easy to add a few more lines, space it out a bit. Since you don't like
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Scone chunk: http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/17465.html?thread=65824569
Appologies for vanishing suddenly. Stuff happened and now I have a massive cold. DX I hope to be back soon.
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And we got colds at the same time D:
lol, "Scone chunk"? XD
*pitches tent*
*waits*
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Please take care of yourself and get lots of rest. I can wait, now that I know you haven't forgotten us!
::feeds you chicken soup and lots of vitamin C & zinc::
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I eagerly await your next update, however until then, I will occupy myself by googling baby names (Ah, for my characters that is ;^^).
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“Canada” England stresses the difference. “is perfectly fine, though probably rather worried right now, as his twin brother just vanished.”
“What?” That gets Great Britain’s attention. England can see the pieces as they fall into place. “America, Alfred, he’s here?”
“And dying. Because of what you did.” The part of him that was a pirate and an empire revels in the metaphorical blood those words draw. “Which brings me to why I’m here. I need to figure out how to get him home before he dies.” Great Britain doesn’t respond. “If you refuse to help me, he’ll die. And you’ll have killed him again.”
“You’re lying. You have to be lying. There is no way that Alfred is…”
“Oh for- I’m not- I’m here. Why is it so hard for you to accept that Alfred is, too?!” Arthur is losing hope, fast. He just doesn’t know how in the world he’s supposed to convince someone who won’t even believe himself.
“It is true, Britain.” Says a quiet voice. From the bushes, a cluster of little fae emerge.
They’ve been watching this whole ( ... )
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So happy to see an update.:)
(And a Prussia for you, if you haven't already seen it! http://th03.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/053/d/1/prussia_by_jazzchyk-d3a66ag.jpg )
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Man, I wish England had full on kicked GB's butt.
Aww, guys. :( Don't be sadcakes!
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Great to see that things are progressing and things seem to be a lot more positive now... Great Britain actually agreed to cooperate, and you've got the humour at the end of this. Lovely stuff.
I hope GB hasn't got anything up his sleeves, though. I'm thinking he's definitely neurotic enough to pull something at the last minute, but I'm hoping he won't. O_O
Thanks again for the awesome update and keep up the good work! I'll be eagerly waiting for more. :D
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Overall, good chapter! I love your Kumajirou, and Columbia's habit of hiding information from Alfred is going to get him into trouble at some point, isn't it? XD
Crit in white, feel free to ignore - this is your story!: Great Britain going from denial-of-his-actions to capitulation seemed a little rushed - after two hundred years of being a bitter old man, I feel like he should either a) have had a bit of a clue bat taken to him pre-story (so less certain of his actions, though convinced of his intentions), and/or b) taken longer to agree to help Arthur (maybe he'd stall until he gets a promise to see Alfred "again," or been more surprised when the good fae reappeared to him). Not to say that he can't be a stubborn old coot, or that he wouldn't still be blind to many of the consequences of his actions, but the scene was pretty, hm, mercurial. If you decide to change it in de-anon - which is totally up to you! - it would be pretty easy to add a few more lines, space it out a bit. Since you don't like ( ... )
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England & GB together! Can't wait to see what happens next!
God, I love how you write the interaction between America & Columbia and their telepathic link.
..Sorry if this is a dumb question but what was the third time Canada blocked out his brother? ^^;
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Please update soon because your story is sending chills down my spine!
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FLQ: Front de libération du Québec
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/October_Crisis
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Front_de_lib%C3%A9ration_du_Qu%C3%A9bec
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