America is beautiful. That is the only thing England was sure of, in the hazy heat and fading light of a too hot afternoon. She is beautiful, with her plump flesh that always yields under his hands, her soft skin, her blonde hair and too blue eyes. She even smells beautiful, England thinks with a sigh, a mix of cherry bubble-gum and ice tea and endless grass. She smells sweet and tastes even sweeter, with her clumsy kisses and delightful mouth.
He looks at her, standing on the doorway of his room -their room-, short blue dress hanging on her curves - delicious and sinful. He stands up (old gentleman habits, ‘old fashioned old man, hahaha’, she would say) to greet her, and she runs into his arms, her untamed force almost -almost- knocking him back
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England/Female!America - Fingering + squirting - A fleeting touch (2/2)
anonymous
August 9 2011, 03:19:23 UTC
He kisses his way back and takes hold of one of her breasts, his whole hand unable to cover it all, his mouth focused on the other and kissing, nipping, licking and tugging, breathing over it, making the pink, small nipple stand up an darken, almost trembling. He covers it with his warmth mouth and sucks, hard, eliciting a desperate cry from America. Her legs once again around England’s waist, her back arched upwards, her hand firm on the bed’s headboard. England pulls away and turns his head to take care of America’s other breast: suck, nip, lick, kiss, his hot mouth covering as much as it can, leaving America trembling with need
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anonymous
August 9 2011, 05:13:21 UTC
This was hot, a!anon. I can't believe it was your first time writing het!
You posted it in the wrong place, though D: This should have gone in past-part fills 6, not past-part fills 5. Unfortunately the mods don't have time to go back and update links for every single post on the meme, so it's always a good idea to read the top part before posting a comment.
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anonymous
August 9 2011, 07:55:29 UTC
ooohhhh gosh, this was ridiculously hot *fans self* I can't figure who I'm more jealous of right now, and I would consider myself straight in general :) But you wrote both of them so cutely/sexily and so in love I find myself falling in love with the both of them as well. ♥
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anonymous
August 9 2011, 17:40:52 UTC
Whew! *fans self* Hot, anon! I loved how England wants to make sure America comes before he does. I couldn't tell that was your first try writing het!
What I loved the absolute most about this fic though is not the sex. It's the fact that you didn't make genderbent America a weak, delicate girl. She almost knocks England over when she runs to him, has hard-working hands, and has strong muscles. She's also not a stupid bimbo, and I give you props for not characterizing her that way. <333
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anonymous
August 10 2011, 03:49:40 UTC
I'm SO glad my inexperience didn't show!
I imagine England is a gentleman, even in bed, and specially with women. I think he takes a lot of pride in giving America all the pleasure he can and putting her before of himself. My headcanon makes England very sweet <3
Yay, you liked my characterization! I don't think anyone would describe Male!America as dainty or weak, so I don't think his female self should be, either. America is a strong, hard-working nation and canon America is known for his super-strength, so she should have it, too. I have a thing for how muscles work, how they tense and relax during sex and I like focusing on them... it's a kink, I guess.
And she's definetely not a stupid bimbo, I totally agree.
Re: England/Female!America - Fingering + squirting - A fleeting touch (2/2)
anonymous
August 12 2011, 00:28:11 UTC
Thank you very much for commenting! I'm super glad you found it hot, I was really nervous about writing het, so it's really great to know that people liked it :) And I like writing smut with some sweetness in it, so I feel really accomplished.
Re: England/Female!America - Fingering + squirting - A fleeting touch (2/2)
anonymous
August 12 2011, 21:22:11 UTC
This is really good! Most of the problem I have with reading het is that I'm a girl and I look at it and go, "like hell that's going to feel good" or it's described in a way that's just so painfully awkward that it's clear this author is not used to het at all
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Re: England/Female!America - Fingering + squirting - A fleeting touch (2/2)
anonymous
August 15 2011, 02:38:13 UTC
Thank you for this wonderfully thoughtful comment. It means a lot that you gave so much thought to my story.
I've already taken note of the issues you mentioned. I'm an ESL writer and "wriggle" seemed fine to me, I wasn't aware that it could be related to worms! The G-spot thing came from men usually missing it, in my experience, but you are right, it shouldn't be too hard to find. I'll add something about America being fine with England coming on her. It's a personal kink of mine so I took it as granted. I'll fix these things when I de-anon this story.
I'm very happy that you like my characterisation. I'm usually frustrated with the way writers present F!America and I really wanted to do a good job with her. England is my favourite character and I love writing him, so it's nice to see I've done something well.
Thank you so much for reading and for commenting, you've made my day.
Re: England/Female!America - Fingering + squirting - A fleeting touch (2/2)
anonymous
August 15 2011, 08:26:47 UTC
I came from the concrit topic and...I really have nothing to nitpick. This is fantastic, sensual het done in a perfectly lush, wonderful style. It's possibly one of the best het porn, if not best porn on the kink meme.
Re: England/Female!America - Fingering + squirting - A fleeting touch (2/2)
anonymous
August 15 2011, 18:21:08 UTC
Thank you so much!!! You made me blush ♥ I'm so incredibly happy that you like this story, I was so nervous about it! Thank you so much for reading and commenting :)
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America is beautiful. That is the only thing England was sure of, in the hazy heat and fading light of a too hot afternoon. She is beautiful, with her plump flesh that always yields under his hands, her soft skin, her blonde hair and too blue eyes. She even smells beautiful, England thinks with a sigh, a mix of cherry bubble-gum and ice tea and endless grass. She smells sweet and tastes even sweeter, with her clumsy kisses and delightful mouth.
He looks at her, standing on the doorway of his room -their room-, short blue dress hanging on her curves - delicious and sinful. He stands up (old gentleman habits, ‘old fashioned old man, hahaha’, she would say) to greet her, and she runs into his arms, her untamed force almost -almost- knocking him back ( ... )
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You posted it in the wrong place, though D: This should have gone in past-part fills 6, not past-part fills 5. Unfortunately the mods don't have time to go back and update links for every single post on the meme, so it's always a good idea to read the top part before posting a comment.
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I can't believe I messed up like that... that's what you get for posting half asleep. I'm very sorry ;_;
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Great job, anon!
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I can't figure who I'm more jealous of right now, and I would consider myself straight in general :) But you wrote both of them so cutely/sexily and so in love I find myself falling in love with the both of them as well. ♥
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What I loved the absolute most about this fic though is not the sex. It's the fact that you didn't make genderbent America a weak, delicate girl. She almost knocks England over when she runs to him, has hard-working hands, and has strong muscles. She's also not a stupid bimbo, and I give you props for not characterizing her that way. <333
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I imagine England is a gentleman, even in bed, and specially with women. I think he takes a lot of pride in giving America all the pleasure he can and putting her before of himself. My headcanon makes England very sweet <3
Yay, you liked my characterization! I don't think anyone would describe Male!America as dainty or weak, so I don't think his female self should be, either. America is a strong, hard-working nation and canon America is known for his super-strength, so she should have it, too. I have a thing for how muscles work, how they tense and relax during sex and I like focusing on them... it's a kink, I guess.
And she's definetely not a stupid bimbo, I totally agree.
Thank you for reading and enjoying it!
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I've already taken note of the issues you mentioned. I'm an ESL writer and "wriggle" seemed fine to me, I wasn't aware that it could be related to worms! The G-spot thing came from men usually missing it, in my experience, but you are right, it shouldn't be too hard to find. I'll add something about America being fine with England coming on her. It's a personal kink of mine so I took it as granted. I'll fix these things when I de-anon this story.
I'm very happy that you like my characterisation. I'm usually frustrated with the way writers present F!America and I really wanted to do a good job with her. England is my favourite character and I love writing him, so it's nice to see I've done something well.
Thank you so much for reading and for commenting, you've made my day.
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So no need to admit any fail, this is fantastic ♥
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