I Think I Need a New Heart [1a/?]
anonymous
May 30 2011, 21:25:14 UTC
this is my first time experimenting with html so forgive me any mistakes. anyways i'm not sure if OP is okay with an AU but I couldn't help myself. this part is really just an introduction. I promise more of the actual prompt later Original Request: America is head over heels in love with France; Canada is similarly smitten with England. Both agree to help each other conquer the object of their affections. Thing is, America totally fails every time at the sophistication that France likes, even with all his twin's attempts to train him. Canada fails to call England's attention to himself, even while his brother generously tries to fade into the background. Bonus. It could be interesting to see this prompt with FrUK going on secretly, seeking in each other the twin they're in love with. http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/20026.html?thread=71806010#t71806010
They weren’t a family. People thought they were when they bickered at restaurants or saw
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Thanks for the lovely comments everyone. To the anon who almost deanoned and left such a helpful comment I just wanted to let you know that Gilbert is definetly doing to be in the story but i dont know if Ludwig is. For you I will try (though it won't be incest in the story :D) I've decided that the plot will always be centered on FACE but other characters will show up. Also Arthur and Francis will eventually actually be in the story. I promise
I'm a first-time reader here and I just wanted to say that I am thoroughly enjoying this story. Especially Matt's thoughts on Alfred right there at the end. So adorable.
I Think I Need a New Heart [4a/?]
anonymous
June 10 2011, 02:51:50 UTC
The first thing they did was watch My Fair Lady.
No, that wasn’t quite true. The first thing they actually did was visit Gilbert. Gilbert was the world’s biggest asshole, a title he took supreme pride in. He was also one of Francis’ best friends and a male model; both qualifying him to assist with the plan to make Alfred more attractive to Francis.
He was constantly bored so he welcomed Matthew and Alfred into his swanky apartment without batting an eyelash.
“So what can I do for you gentlemen?” Gilbert had asked, looking like an albino sex god as he had neglected to put on a shirt.
“How do you get abs like that?” Alfred exclaimed, distracted from his original purpose.
Matthew had been the one to get back on track (but only after discovering how exactly Gilbert got so ripped). It had been a little frightening how quickly the model’s red eyes had glowed when Matthew had said the word ‘makeover
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I Think I Need a New Heart [4b/?]
anonymous
June 10 2011, 03:03:54 UTC
Gilbert looked extremely speculative. Anyone who knew him well would’ve run in the other direction and probably booked a flight to Burma just to be on the safe side but Matthew and Alfred hadn’t known Gilbert long enough to have the proper fear response to that look
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I Think I Need a New Heart [5/?]
anonymous
June 10 2011, 03:14:04 UTC
Feli’s brother’s place was a little Italian restaurant tucked away in some back alley. It looked sketchy as mess but the food was excellent. The not-a-family ate there three or four times a month
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I Think I Need a New Heart [5b/?]
anonymous
June 10 2011, 03:26:04 UTC
Francis put a dramatic hand over his heart. “He is wonderful but alas my heart can never belong to just one person. I am a free spirit and my beautiful Gilbert understands this. It is tragic it is true but it cannot be helped.”
Alfred eyes were wide and vaguely horrified but Arthur looked unimpressed. “By that load of shit you really meant that he’s not into you.”
Francis looked imperious. “Don’t be, how do you English say it, daft Arthur. Everyone is into me
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I cannot express how overwhelmingly grateful I am for all the positive comments. You really inspire me to continue writing this story and your affections are returned 200%. I apologize for chapter 4 as I felt it was a little choppy. I hope you like the characters that just got introduced as you will be seeing more of them. In particular Gilbert because I adore writing him. Also just noticed this Lovino is not dick, he is a dick meh sorry I have a tendency to skip words
I just love love love LOVE your characterization~! I mean, it's just so refreshing to see fabulous!Gilbert and a Matthew who isn't ignored by everyone.
I loved Gilbert in here. omg, you had me laughing the moment he entered the story. haha, where does he get all the money? Also this is the same anon who suggested Gilbert/Ludwig and well I would be super duper happy if you manage to incorporate it into the story. Like really ecstatic.
haha, I love how Lovino and Arthur get along in the story. I'm sure they both bond over their tsundere-ness.
I have to say though, and this is no offence to you, but well, Francis is kind of a jerk in the story. From the present stand point, I think Alfred is better off not being with him.
Also a typo I caught: “So why the decision to finally develop of sense of style?” Should be a there.
AuthorAnon here
anonymous
June 12 2011, 16:42:13 UTC
Your comments make me happy anon! I appreciate the feedback I'm glad you like Gilbert and I realize that France is a jerk. And in the next chapter he gets worse. A lot of the characterization of Francis and Arthur is from the POV of Matthew and Alfred so they don't really get done justice yey. Later there will be chapters from Francis and Arthur's POV that make them a little more multi-dimensional. And again I apologize to everyone reading these last chapters. They had several errors and the more I review it the more I see. The next one will be better I promise.
I Think I Need a New Heart [6/?]
anonymous
June 14 2011, 19:29:31 UTC
They left Lovino’s stuffed full of good food and in a much better humor than before they had eaten. Alfred had thrown a companionable arm around Matthew’s shoulders and Francis and Arthur weren’t yelling at each other for once
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this is my first time experimenting with html so forgive me any mistakes. anyways i'm not sure if OP is okay with an AU but I couldn't help myself. this part is really just an introduction. I promise more of the actual prompt later
Original Request: America is head over heels in love with France; Canada is similarly smitten with England. Both agree to help each other conquer the object of their affections.
Thing is, America totally fails every time at the sophistication that France likes, even with all his twin's attempts to train him. Canada fails to call England's attention to himself, even while his brother generously tries to fade into the background.
Bonus. It could be interesting to see this prompt with FrUK going on secretly, seeking in each other the twin they're in love with.
http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/20026.html?thread=71806010#t71806010
They weren’t a family. People thought they were when they bickered at restaurants or saw ( ... )
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No, that wasn’t quite true. The first thing they actually did was visit Gilbert. Gilbert was the world’s biggest asshole, a title he took supreme pride in. He was also one of Francis’ best friends and a male model; both qualifying him to assist with the plan to make Alfred more attractive to Francis.
He was constantly bored so he welcomed Matthew and Alfred into his swanky apartment without batting an eyelash.
“So what can I do for you gentlemen?” Gilbert had asked, looking like an albino sex god as he had neglected to put on a shirt.
“How do you get abs like that?” Alfred exclaimed, distracted from his original purpose.
Matthew had been the one to get back on track (but only after discovering how exactly Gilbert got so ripped). It had been a little frightening how quickly the model’s red eyes had glowed when Matthew had said the word ‘makeover ( ... )
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Alfred eyes were wide and vaguely horrified but Arthur looked unimpressed. “By that load of shit you really meant that he’s not into you.”
Francis looked imperious. “Don’t be, how do you English say it, daft Arthur. Everyone is into me ( ... )
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Also just noticed this
Lovino is not dick, he is a dick
meh sorry I have a tendency to skip words
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BOOKMARKING LIKE WHOA
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haha, I love how Lovino and Arthur get along in the story. I'm sure they both bond over their tsundere-ness.
I have to say though, and this is no offence to you, but well, Francis is kind of a jerk in the story. From the present stand point, I think Alfred is better off not being with him.
Also a typo I caught:
“So why the decision to finally develop of sense of style?”
Should be a there.
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I'm glad you like Gilbert and I realize that France is a jerk. And in the next chapter he gets worse. A lot of the characterization of Francis and Arthur is from the POV of Matthew and Alfred so they don't really get done justice yey. Later there will be chapters from Francis and Arthur's POV that make them a little more multi-dimensional.
And again I apologize to everyone reading these last chapters. They had several errors and the more I review it the more I see. The next one will be better I promise.
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