USUK Wizard and Hero
anonymous
March 30 2011, 02:47:06 UTC
Arthur is an evil wizard that gets his jollies from burning down villages, torturing and killing people, and generally just being an asshole. He brings ruin to the land one too many times, and finally the king issues a decree of emergency and requests for a brave hero to step up and slay the wizard. After many failed attempts, our hero Alfred comes along
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Of Heroes and Wizards [1/??]
anonymous
April 9 2011, 06:04:44 UTC
Oh hai, shy, rookie author!anon giving this a shot, do hope you like it! Maybe my slight inconsistencies won't be too bad.
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Of Heroes and WizardsEveryone feared for their lives. It wasn’t because of thieves or murderers either. Everyone feared for their lives because of the evil wizard Arthur. He had just struck a village not too far from the king’s city. As a cruel joke, Arthur gave the kingdom a simple warning to prepare for his attack in a week, but three days later the wizard was standing right outside the king’s castle. Arthur didn’t really seem in the slightest bit impressed. Dusting his hands off, Arthur decided to see how fast this kingdom could restore itself before he attacked it again. It was only for his amusement, and plus, Arthur had to make it worthwhile before he moved onto another village. It wasn’t often that he got to attack a kingdom, and when he did, he made sure to do as much damage to it as he could. Unfortunately, the ability to do this all in one day was impossible, and he was forced to end his day just
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Re: Of Heroes and Wizards [2a/??]
anonymous
April 9 2011, 06:08:59 UTC
Alfred hated that he had to leave his horse at the bottom of mountain. Though, even if he tried to bring his trusty steed up the mountain, he wouldn’t have gotten too far up. The blond maneuvered over several rocks before reaching a cave. Alfred spent a few moments checking his armor, making sure it was tightly secured before heading in the cave entrance, hand on sword. Just as the king had mentioned, the cave was starting to have the appearance of a shack. There was no telling how long the wizard took to build this, and it was quite large
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Re: Of Heroes and Wizards [2b/??]
anonymous
April 9 2011, 06:09:53 UTC
“Take this!” Arthur managed to send a bright burst of purple at Alfred. Alfred gave it one last shot and threw his sword at Arthur. Alfred wasn’t sure if he hit the wizard or not, but he had heard a scream as his took a direct hit with the attack. He wasn’t sure if it was his or Arthur’s, but one thing he did know what that his vision was getting slightly fuzzy. He groggily found himself getting off the ground and heading into Arthur’s direction
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Re: Of Heroes and Wizards [2b/??]
anonymous
April 9 2011, 14:17:08 UTC
Very cool, author!anon; you've got me looking forward to finding out Arthur's motives (besides loneliness/boredom/misanthropy) and how "evil" he really is. (I'm not sure if he's going around killing innocent bystanders or if he's just killing anybody who gets in his way, for instance.) Not to mention that Alfred's moral dilemma and the development of their relationship will be interesting; it looks like it's going to be a bumpy ride!
Re: Of Heroes and Wizards [3/??]
anonymous
April 15 2011, 01:04:45 UTC
Thanks for the comments, guys! I apologize for being a little slow with the story, normally I do a lot better than this...The night seemed to have dragged by. Alfred kept falling in and out of sleep, and it didn’t help that his injuries were starting to feel a bit worse. The young blond sat up and looked out the cave. A small amount of luminescent color shown in the sky, so dawn wasn’t too far from approaching. Alfred smiled and decided it was best to gather a few herbs and supplies before heading off again. He headed for the opening of the cave and stopped next to his horse. “Keep a watch on Arthur, pal. I don’t want him trying to escape on me, alright
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Re: Of Heroes and Wizards [4a/??]
anonymous
April 15 2011, 01:08:07 UTC
Shhhh, I like posting two parts at a time, I write short chapters, it deserves it. xDThe duo originally intended to take the same path Alfred used when he came through. They originally intended to just walk away from the destruction that lay way in their path, not further investigated. Arthur had that feeling that if they never tried looking at what was the cause of the mass amount of debris, that they wouldn’t be in the situation they’re in now
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Re: Of Heroes and Wizards [4b/??]
anonymous
April 15 2011, 03:25:18 UTC
Ah, I love the updates for this ^_^
Just a note. You shouldn't have multiple people speaking in one paragraph. When someone new speaks, give them their own paragraph. It gets confusing with things like this:
Arthur stopped his magic for a moment and glared at Alfred. “That’s really none of your business.” The wizard then went back to concentrating on Alfred’s arm. Alfred, not in the least bit satisfied with the answer, persisted. “Was it out of boredom? What about bloodlust? Are you angry with someone? Do you want friends? What about-“
It's easier to read as:
Arthur stopped his magic for a moment and glared at Alfred. “That’s really none of your business.” The wizard then went back to concentrating on Alfred’s arm.
Alfred, not in the least bit satisfied with the answer, persisted. “Was it out of boredom? What about bloodlust? Are you angry with someone? Do you want friends? What about-“
The same usually goes with actions. New action, new paragraph. Just a note <3
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Maybe my slight inconsistencies won't be too bad.
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Of Heroes and WizardsEveryone feared for their lives. It wasn’t because of thieves or murderers either. Everyone feared for their lives because of the evil wizard Arthur. He had just struck a village not too far from the king’s city. As a cruel joke, Arthur gave the kingdom a simple warning to prepare for his attack in a week, but three days later the wizard was standing right outside the king’s castle. Arthur didn’t really seem in the slightest bit impressed. Dusting his hands off, Arthur decided to see how fast this kingdom could restore itself before he attacked it again. It was only for his amusement, and plus, Arthur had to make it worthwhile before he moved onto another village. It wasn’t often that he got to attack a kingdom, and when he did, he made sure to do as much damage to it as he could. Unfortunately, the ability to do this all in one day was impossible, and he was forced to end his day just ( ... )
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Just a note. You shouldn't have multiple people speaking in one paragraph. When someone new speaks, give them their own paragraph. It gets confusing with things like this:
Arthur stopped his magic for a moment and glared at Alfred. “That’s really none of your business.” The wizard then went back to concentrating on Alfred’s arm. Alfred, not in the least bit satisfied with the answer, persisted. “Was it out of boredom? What about bloodlust? Are you angry with someone? Do you want friends? What about-“
It's easier to read as:
Arthur stopped his magic for a moment and glared at Alfred. “That’s really none of your business.” The wizard then went back to concentrating on Alfred’s arm.
Alfred, not in the least bit satisfied with the answer, persisted. “Was it out of boredom? What about bloodlust? Are you angry with someone? Do you want friends? What about-“
The same usually goes with actions. New action, new paragraph. Just a note <3
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