Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1a/1]
anonymous
May 1 2011, 22:23:28 UTC
Arthur, reigning Queen of the Kingdom of Spades, stormed out of the Castle, all the while talking furiously. “...I mean, really, why the hell did I ever decide to marry that bloody idiot
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Re: Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1b/1]
anonymous
May 1 2011, 22:26:29 UTC
Alfred was sitting on his throne, pouting, listening to his Jack Yao's lecture. He was the King, he shouldn't have to listen to lectures! But Yao seemed to think he was a child, it was unfair!
“...you should be more considerate! All the fighting between you and the Queen makes our kingdom look weak to the others, and we really don't need that when there could be war any minute!”
“Geez, give it a break! Do you think I like fighting with him?”, Alfred interrupted, earning him a glare from the Jack
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Re: Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1c/1]
anonymous
May 1 2011, 22:29:13 UTC
When Arthur regained consciousness, the first thing he noticed was that he was lying on a soft surface. Slowly blinking his eyes open, all he saw was black and red. He looked around at his surroundings. It seemed he was in a bed-chamber, though he had no idea where it was and why he was there. He tried to sit up, but was met with a pounding pain in his head
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Re: Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1d/1]
anonymous
May 1 2011, 22:34:43 UTC
Alfred was frustrated. Even with the fast travel methods for emergencies (and his beloved Queen being taken from him was totally an emergency!), it had taken a day for the rulers of Clubs and Diamonds to arrive. And so far, nothing had happened.
All they did was discuss the possibilities of what could happen if they did this or did that, and if it was the last straw to cause the outbreak of the long-dreaded war. While normally, he didn't mind those discussions - it was his job, after all - it was entirely different with Arthur in the hands of the Kingdom of Hearts.
“We're wasting too much time”, he finally said to vent his frustration, “all the talk about possibilities doesn't help at all! I need to save Arthur!”
It was silent for a moment as the other Kings looked at him. Francis, the King of Diamonds, was the first to speak again. “Ah, the troubles of l'amour!”, he sighed dramatically, “but you have to understand that we can't just help you in a rash move, mon ami. We don't want to bring our own kingdoms into danger
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Re: Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1e/1]
anonymous
May 1 2011, 22:39:39 UTC
Yao had been reluctant at first at the idea of asking the Jokers, but in the end he had given in, seeing as the young Joker Peter was Arthur's brother. Once they had summoned the boy, they explained the situation. Upon hearing that his brother was held hostage in the Hearts Castle, Peter agreed to help, already developing a plan.
Alfred was relieved that they finally could set out to the rescue. With Peter's magic, he could get to the castle quickly and find Arthur without being seen. Peter would wait for them outside and then bring them back home.
At first, it was weird to walk through the corridors with no one noticing. It was exciting, making him feel like he could do anything. The castle was large and he would easily get lost without any idea where to go. But he did know where to go
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Re: Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1f/1]
anonymous
May 1 2011, 22:47:29 UTC
While walking through the corridors on their way out, they hold onto each others' hands tightly. They didn't face any problems, only once or twice needing to stop in order not to run into someone. Finally, they reached the waiting Joker.
“There you are!”, Peter said.
“Hello, Peter”, Arthur greeted, “I see you improved your magic.”
“Of course!”, Peter replied proudly, “and now I'll bring you back home. You can thank me later with a reward. But it better be something cool!”
Arthur rolled his eyes, but nonetheless smiled slightly. “We'll be sure to do so.”
XXXXXXXOnce back in their castle, they were immediately received by Yao and Hong. The Jack was once again in the mode of lecturing and the Queen's servant apologized for not being there when the attack occurred. Arthur endured everything patiently, assuring that he was tired, but fine
( ... )
I really love how Alfred and Arthur missed each other. Alfred calling Arthur "his beloved Queen", and Arthur wanting to spend time with his husband, is just so sweet anon!! ( and I love how you added Peter in the story. <3 )
You really did a good job writing this. Thank you very much A!anon for filling this!
And you should de-anon, this is a really good story. Seperate chapters and don't update fast, let people review and tell you how wonderful this is. But of course, It's up to you, the last two sentences was just an advice :)
I'm glad you liked it :) I'm at my best when writing fluff and Kitsch, so I'm happy you liked those moments.
And thank you for the advice! I'm not really good with chapterfics, so I just posted it all at once^^" also because this was my first time writing a fill, so I don't really know how everything works u_u Though I don't know if and when I'll deanon - if I do, I want to improve it a bit first.
Re: Of Arguments and kidnapped Queens [1f/1]
anonymous
May 2 2011, 05:37:46 UTC
Kingdom of Spades. Arthur the Queen. Hong. Special watches that pinpoint the oher's location. Hong. Why did I marry that idiot. Yao as the Jack.
I think I know you, authornon. The story is familiar....
Nevertheless. That I remember stories like these means you have a good original story! I love this verse. If it is the anon I think you are...I feel like as if I am seeing their future...d'awwwww. Oh you two.
The only problem I see are the punctuation marks. The comma goes first before the closing quotation mark.
author!anon speaking
anonymous
May 2 2011, 17:18:56 UTC
Oh damn, only now after reading your comment did I realize how much I was influenced in my subconcious while writing... author!anon feels ashamed now u_u
Though I have to say that with the roles of Arthur, Alfred and Yao I followed the canon of the official Card Deck AU-verse. Hongkong is the 4 of Spades and because he used to be Arthur's colony I used him as his personal servant. I searched for another name for him, but according to the hetalia shoutwiki, it's the most popular name in fanon for him and when I couldn't remember which other names I'd seen used for him, I just went with it in the end. *forgot to mention the name when posting because it was late at night*
But thank you for telling me about the punctuation marks! We never really learned punctuation rules in our English lessons, so I had no idea it was that different and just did it the same way as in German. I'll be sure to remember how it's done correctly :)
Though I have no idea what to write as an omake (I don't even know the full meaning of the word orz), because only writing about Ludwig's (+ Kiku and Feli) reaction when finding Arthur gone would be a bit lame and with a lack of USUK (it would be fun to write, though). But I'll give it a thought and who knows - maybe I'll even get enough ideas and inspiration to expand this story xD
I just want to read more of this King and Queen stuff from the Arte Stella Artbook :)
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“...you should be more considerate! All the fighting between you and the Queen makes our kingdom look weak to the others, and we really don't need that when there could be war any minute!”
“Geez, give it a break! Do you think I like fighting with him?”, Alfred interrupted, earning him a glare from the Jack ( ... )
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All they did was discuss the possibilities of what could happen if they did this or did that, and if it was the last straw to cause the outbreak of the long-dreaded war. While normally, he didn't mind those discussions - it was his job, after all - it was entirely different with Arthur in the hands of the Kingdom of Hearts.
“We're wasting too much time”, he finally said to vent his frustration, “all the talk about possibilities doesn't help at all! I need to save Arthur!”
It was silent for a moment as the other Kings looked at him. Francis, the King of Diamonds, was the first to speak again. “Ah, the troubles of l'amour!”, he sighed dramatically, “but you have to understand that we can't just help you in a rash move, mon ami. We don't want to bring our own kingdoms into danger ( ... )
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Alfred was relieved that they finally could set out to the rescue. With Peter's magic, he could get to the castle quickly and find Arthur without being seen. Peter would wait for them outside and then bring them back home.
At first, it was weird to walk through the corridors with no one noticing. It was exciting, making him feel like he could do anything. The castle was large and he would easily get lost without any idea where to go. But he did know where to go ( ... )
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“There you are!”, Peter said.
“Hello, Peter”, Arthur greeted, “I see you improved your magic.”
“Of course!”, Peter replied proudly, “and now I'll bring you back home. You can thank me later with a reward. But it better be something cool!”
Arthur rolled his eyes, but nonetheless smiled slightly. “We'll be sure to do so.”
XXXXXXXOnce back in their castle, they were immediately received by Yao and Hong. The Jack was once again in the mode of lecturing and the Queen's servant apologized for not being there when the attack occurred. Arthur endured everything patiently, assuring that he was tired, but fine ( ... )
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I really love how Alfred and Arthur missed each other.
Alfred calling Arthur "his beloved Queen", and Arthur wanting to spend time
with his husband, is just so sweet anon!! ( and I love how you added Peter in the story. <3 )
You really did a good job writing this.
Thank you very much A!anon for filling this!
And you should de-anon, this is a really good story.
Seperate chapters and don't update fast, let people review and tell you how wonderful this is.
But of course, It's up to you, the last two sentences was just an advice :)
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I'm glad you liked it :) I'm at my best when writing fluff and Kitsch, so I'm happy you liked those moments.
And thank you for the advice! I'm not really good with chapterfics, so I just posted it all at once^^" also because this was my first time writing a fill, so I don't really know how everything works u_u
Though I don't know if and when I'll deanon - if I do, I want to improve it a bit first.
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You did well author!anon! ^^
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I think I know you, authornon. The story is familiar....
Nevertheless. That I remember stories like these means you have a good original story! I love this verse. If it is the anon I think you are...I feel like as if I am seeing their future...d'awwwww. Oh you two.
The only problem I see are the punctuation marks. The comma goes first before the closing quotation mark.
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Though I have to say that with the roles of Arthur, Alfred and Yao I followed the canon of the official Card Deck AU-verse. Hongkong is the 4 of Spades and because he used to be Arthur's colony I used him as his personal servant. I searched for another name for him, but according to the hetalia shoutwiki, it's the most popular name in fanon for him and when I couldn't remember which other names I'd seen used for him, I just went with it in the end. *forgot to mention the name when posting because it was late at night*
But thank you for telling me about the punctuation marks! We never really learned punctuation rules in our English lessons, so I had no idea it was that different and just did it the same way as in German. I'll be sure to remember how it's done correctly :)
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I love this verse so much~ and so.. this fanfiction totally made my day!
Maybe you can make an omake out of it? :D
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Though I have no idea what to write as an omake (I don't even know the full meaning of the word orz), because only writing about Ludwig's (+ Kiku and Feli) reaction when finding Arthur gone would be a bit lame and with a lack of USUK (it would be fun to write, though).
But I'll give it a thought and who knows - maybe I'll even get enough ideas and inspiration to expand this story xD
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unfortunately I don't recognize the style, but I really want to see your other works a!a. ;___;
other non, would you mind telling this anon who a!a is. (give me hiiiints!! please!) This was extremely cute! i liked this a lot.
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