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Part 20 -- USUK, "London Bridge," England doesn't think he's loveable anonymous October 23 2011, 05:15:10 UTC
Hello everyone! This is the placeholder for "London Bridge."

Original request and previous chapters here: http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/20749.html?thread=82831117#t82831117

After World War Two (and after being pretty much shipped by good ol' Churchill) America decides it's time to let England know how he feels about him. It's a big mistake, because England turns him down. America keeps trying, England keeps refusing, but it's not because he outright doesn't like America- it's because every time America confesses it sounds like a joke, and part of England doesn't believe America because he doesn't think he's lovable. Happy ending not required, but it would be nice. <3

Bonus 1- America's innocent attempts to tell England how he feels turn into complete cracky disasters. Appearances of France trying to fix everything but just making it worse optional.
Bonus 2- Not too much angst. 'Cause low self esteem is angsty enough!Anyway, please enjoy ( ... )

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Re: Part X, notes anonymous February 21 2012, 08:44:13 UTC
Aaaaaaahhh

aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhh

so glad to see you updated

i really like your use of history and quotes

sometimes it can be overdone, but here it just felt so right

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author anon here anonymous February 22 2012, 03:49:11 UTC
: D

Thank you! And thank you for taking the time to comment.

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Re: Part X, notes anonymous February 21 2012, 08:50:17 UTC
*sigh* This was so lovely. But so long! I hope you repost elsewhere, for easier rereading. I haven't reread it long enough that I couldn't remember who 'Marie' was..

I think Alfred was having trouble not swooning at Arthur's speech.

And London Bridge has indeed been rebuilt again and again...they sold the last one to an American millionaire, who had it transported, stone by stone, and rebuilt like a puzzle in Arizona. Of all places..! Part of me wants to see Arthur visit the thing...

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author anon here anonymous February 22 2012, 00:38:14 UTC
Ahhhhh, I know, it was a little long...I can't wait to edit this story and de-anon with a "cleaner" version. And I love the meme, but sometimes all the posting and linking can seriously mess with a story's flow. : /

I'd swoon too if a handsome absolutely invincible British gentleman started quoting poetry at me!

I first heard about it being in Arizona when my grandfather mentioned something about it...I totally didn't believe him at first. You're right -- Arizona, of all places! XD

Thank you for taking the time to comment, it really means a lot.

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Re: Part X, notes anonymous February 21 2012, 14:12:37 UTC
Every single one of your updates makes me insanely happy and keeps me glued to the screen. Anon, you're simply amazing and I don't mind to wait if this is the result. Also, you have every reason to feel more self confident about your writing. Granted, there are very good fics in the fandom, but yours is top quality for sure!

England and America literally warmed my heart. It must be insane to feel so happy for the fictional happyness of fictional carachters, but still...:D And England keeps on thinking he his 'not good at this', but he managed one hell of declaration of love! If somebody came to me with such words I could pass out XD I'm talking about the quotes of course, wich were gorgeous, all the rest instead was uber cute <3 ( ... )

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author anon here anonymous February 22 2012, 00:57:10 UTC
Oh wow, thank you very much! : D

Aw, no, I get ridiculously happy and giddy when my babies, no matter what fandom, get a happy ending. I know tragic endings are all ~artsy~ and ~meaningful~, and I do enjoy them, but sometimes it's just nice to sit back and bask in fluff and happiness!

And, England. OH ENGLAND. Poor baby, it's all so new to him and he's still a little insecure, so he beats himself up over how he has to quote other people to adequately express himself. He's completely oblivious to how romantic and swoon-worthy he is. XD

I agree about the length and how disjointed it appears. I can't wait to edit this story and post a "clean" version. But I'd also love to be stalked and keep in touch with everyone!

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LJ is weird - sorry if this appears 2 times! anonymous February 21 2012, 14:15:17 UTC
Every single one of your updates makes me insanely happy and keeps me glued to the screen. Anon, you're simply amazing and I don't mind to wait if this is the result. Also, you have every reason to feel more self confident about your writing. Granted, there are very good fics in the fandom, but yours is top quality for sure!

England and America literally warmed my heart. It must be insane to feel so happy for the fictional happyness of fictional carachters, but still...:D And England keeps on thinking he his 'not good at this', but he managed one hell of declaration of love! If somebody came to me with such words I could pass out XD I'm talking about the quotes of course, wich were gorgeous, all the rest instead was uber cute <3 ( ... )

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Re: Part X, notes anonymous February 21 2012, 15:40:41 UTC
Critic!Anon back ( ... )

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author anon here anonymous February 22 2012, 01:34:52 UTC
Oh, no! No no no, long comment anon! You weren't harsh and you didn't discourage me at all! I'm sorry if I made you think that. : ( I really, really appreciate the honesty of your critics; that you take the time to express your thoughts/concerns and have stuck with this story til the end really means a lot. I always take what you say into consideration. And please don't apologize for not responding to my last reply -- you're under no obligation to! : ) Life happens and I should be the very least of your worries, lol! I also apologize profusely if I was at any time harsh in tone.

Honestly, most of my lack of motivation came from reading some really good fics. I was being so childish about it, too. Instead of loving those stories, appreciating them for what they are, and being inspired by them, I was getting straight-up jealous. I'm...really embarrassed that I let myself get like that, actually. I was also putting a lot of pressure on myself with this chapter and kinda psyched myself out. Also, on a personal note? I'm thankful to have ( ... )

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Re: author anon here anonymous February 22 2012, 14:10:52 UTC
I'm very glad that it wasn't me that caused your discouragement. And based on what you explained was the cause, I actually might be the opposite of you. I feel that fanfiction at it's best demonstrates the ability of normal, average people to produce admirable and creative works. Instead, I get more discouraged reading the classics because it's impossible to imitate geniuses. I've battled with my own depreciating sense of self-work in reading such literature, and it's put a real hamper on my motivation to write something as well. The problem with being a perfectionist is that you will never get anything done - so I tell myself that I should just go ahead and write something for practice without worrying about its quality as much - and I fall into the same habit again of being too hard on myself. That's why I say it's really admirable that you finished this fill. You should be really proud of yourself because even while bearing feelings of supposed inadequacies you pulled through ( ... )

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a!a anonymous February 24 2012, 00:34:18 UTC
No way, not creepy at all, my good sir/madam! I would love to hear from you, so please don't hesitate to keep in touch. And creating an account somewhere usually does seem to be a good motivator...at least with my personal experience. And having friends who write is also a good motivator! I'm lucky to have a friend in "real life" who also writes; I love the actual person-to-person face time, though I don't think I would ever show her any of my actual work, lawl ( ... )

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Re: a!a anonymous February 27 2012, 01:03:29 UTC
Wow, somehow I missed this response! ><

Know what you mean about friends. There's no way I could show my university friends what I do on my spare time. Hahahaha... :P Besides, I need to get away from fandom and enjoy other aspects of life sometimes. Thankfully I have two wonderful sisters who I can rant to. :P

I'll contact you on ff.net when I can think of a good penname! LOL Pretty soon, maybe tomorrow or the next day! ^_^

And a kinkmeme prompt really got me going so I can already see the start of a fanfic! (I've been thinking about it obsessively for a week now.) Great departure from what I ultimately want to be able to write but it'll be loads of fun and help me experiment, I think, and also help me escape perfectionism. :)

<3

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Re: Part X, notes anonymous February 21 2012, 20:30:24 UTC
The fact that you updated brightened my gloomy day. This is a beautiful story that manages to have everyone in character. It's serious without feeling stiff and forced, the characters have depth without becoming OCs and the story itself is heart-breaking in its humanity.

I love how the characters interact and how clear their voices are. Yo make me believe that this are England, France and America talking and interacting. I'm amazed by your talent.

Your notes make me a happy reader and I admit I have a soft spot for Richard II, too. The man is everything my parliamentary, liberal democrat spirit dislikes but he was also a victim of his own unfitness to occupy the Throne. And of the large shadow of his father and grandfather. Who can measure up against Edward II and the Black Prince? Really, it took a whirlwind like Henry V to be able to compare to them. /Digression over

The writer France mentions is Oscar Wilde, right? I've always been fascinated by Wilde's travel to America.

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author anon here anonymous February 22 2012, 02:09:33 UTC
Aw, thank you so much! The fact that you took time out of your busy day to comment brightened my gloomy day! : )

I'm happy that everyone seems to be IC. This is my first time writing for Hetalia and I love these characters so, so much that I'd hate to do them any sort of injustice. And, wow -- your compliments are really too much, but thank you ( ... )

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Re: Part X, notes anonymous February 21 2012, 21:37:23 UTC
I love this fill so much. I'm so happy that there is going to be an epilogue, but I can't believe it is coming to an end. I'm going to miss reading it.

This last update had me crying I was so happy for Arthur and Alfred. I loved all the bits of literature you've sprinkled in, and the way you had Arthur confess his feelings.

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