This is pretty much a general fill-request; When Character A realizes he/she's in love Character B. Multiple fills encouraged. I just want some romantic fluff to go awwwww over late at night orz
Wasn't Admitting anything
anonymous
July 7 2010, 14:21:25 UTC
Well, Romano Didn't want to as Coprative as he coudl e.. but here's a little Fill (forst time to a fill on this, working on a few others, feed back appreciatied XD) ---------------------- Spain was talking to France and Prussia. He hated those two. Whenever they came over Spain spent all his time with them, ignoring him.
Spain wasn’t allowed to ignore him damn it.
“ So Antoni?-” France said Spain’s name all wrong, He emphasised the ‘Ant’ at the beginning, paying little mind to the ‘onio’ at the end. It was ugly, it made his ears hurt. How the hell could Spain just listen to that Shit?
He knew exactly how Antonio should be pronounced, he could was Italian after all Spanish names were second nature to him. It had nothing at all to do with the night’s he’d spend muttering the name in different styles, breathless, needy, lovingly. Nothing at all. The three were hugging now. Urgh so disgusting. Prussia’s hand rested lightly on Spain’s head, While France’s Hands were on Spain’s shoulders, Spain chuckling between them. Idiots
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Re: Eyes (fail Title is fail)
anonymous
July 11 2010, 18:33:45 UTC
I actually like the descriptions here, but I think... you probably didn't get a very good mark in English class. Is English your second language, or are you a bit too young to be here?
Re: FailWriter!Annon
anonymous
July 13 2010, 02:27:47 UTC
Again, the visual concepts you've got are very appealing, but there are errors that you could have fixed easily enough with a thorough read-through and a few of the tools that came with your word processor. The title on the Fills List was misspelled, you capitalize words that don't need it, and there are a few mistakes with punctuation and grammar. Your vocabulary is clearly very good, and the content is sweet - unfortunately, it's difficult to read, and that's very important here. If you got a beta reader, it would go along way towards helping you communicate your story.
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Spain was talking to France and Prussia. He hated those two. Whenever they came over Spain spent all his time with them, ignoring him.
Spain wasn’t allowed to ignore him damn it.
“ So Antoni?-” France said Spain’s name all wrong, He emphasised the ‘Ant’ at the beginning, paying little mind to the ‘onio’ at the end. It was ugly, it made his ears hurt. How the hell could Spain just listen to that Shit?
He knew exactly how Antonio should be pronounced, he could was Italian after all Spanish names were second nature to him. It had nothing at all to do with the night’s he’d spend muttering the name in different styles, breathless, needy, lovingly. Nothing at all.
The three were hugging now. Urgh so disgusting. Prussia’s hand rested lightly on Spain’s head, While France’s Hands were on Spain’s shoulders, Spain chuckling between them. Idiots ( ... )
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Oh, he must surely say yes!
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But I'm 18 .. And English... Where'd I fail? (is in fat dyslexic)
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