Re: Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 1/??]
anonymous
April 21 2009, 16:09:17 UTC
Oh my. You had me from the very first sentence. Your writing style is gorgeous and captivating, and I love what you've done with this prompt so far (eeee tiny America so cute and skittish ahhaha, and lol Spain wanting to 'tame' him), and I don't usually read Spain-centric pieces.
Also Spain had to admit he did not always have a way with children I lol'd heartily.
Keep it coming, anon! ♥ I'll be over here stalking this fill. :DDD
Re: Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 1/??]
anonymous
April 22 2009, 04:54:05 UTC
OP here.
Stunning use of words. Everything flows so nicely. And here I was figuring that that prompt would never get filled... and wow... you've gone beyond what I've ever imagined.
Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 2/??]
anonymous
May 4 2009, 04:26:38 UTC
The next morning, he set out into the wilderness before the soldiers broke fast, following what faint sense he could gather of the child. He remembered that they called this to-be nation America back home, after the Italian who supposedly first discovered this land. Though that fact bothered him a little, Spain had to admit that he liked the name, how it rolled off the tongue so musically, like a part of him and yet not
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Re: Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 3/??]
anonymous
May 4 2009, 09:43:37 UTC
♥! Is that a Native America-tan I'm seeing? sjlsjkjf this continues to be a great read, and little America is so cute -- I especially loved that he reminded Spain of his brothers. Oh man...
I can't wait to see how this is going to turn out. Especially the horse part, but everything else as well. XD *waits patiently*
Please don't apologize, author!anon! This is utterly wonderful so far, and I'm sure the parts to come will be well worth any wait. I adore your descriptions and love the way you're weaving history into this. I don't know how you've done it, exactly, but Spain really does feel like a being beyond human in this. I bow to you.
Ahh the tensions in the story are rising... so exciting! This was every bit worth the wait (after all, quality over quantity... wait does that even make sense here?) and you also managed to work in the Native Americans too.
I adore how you're slowly building up everything instead of rushing right into it. It gives the whole thing a more realistic feel to it. =)
Thank you, writer!anon is so happy to know that you like this. I tend to be long-winded, so I was a bit worried about that, but I was watching this prompt for a long time and wanted to do it justice.
Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 4/??]
anonymous
May 21 2009, 17:11:37 UTC
[interlude: Spain, 1588]
“Espagne…”
Spain ignored the silken voice, keeping his gaze fixed outside. He did not look up as someone approached his seat by the windowsill, preceded by a faint scent of roses and musk. But Spain was never one to dawdle in court intrigue, so he asked sharply, “What do you want, Francia? Are we not at war?”
“Our kings are at war, oui,” France agreed, languid and careless as he patted the other’s shoulder out of familial concern. “But we are still brothers and friends, is that not so
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Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 5/??]
anonymous
May 21 2009, 17:15:34 UTC
“Darling Spain, because I love you so, I will tell you this, for your own well-being.” In contrast to the words, his tone held not one bit of affection.
“Que?” Spain asked, straightening up from the fighting stance cautiously, still remaining alert.
“It would be best if you attend to your colonies while you still can. And keep your nose out of our affairs.” He did not - could not - miss the double meaning there, and Spain scowled deeply at the implication. “You will not be alone in the New World from now on, and nothing you do is going to change that.”
Spain blinked, a sudden image of a small golden-haired infant flashing in his vision, and he felt a pang of guilt and bewilderment lancing through his heart.
“No, of course not…”
“If you understand, then fine.” The other nation tossed his hair and straightened his clothes as best as he could, frowning at an imaginary speck of dust on the dark fur cuffs of his coat. “Farewell, mon frere, I will see you again… Hopefully on better terms
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Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 7/8]
anonymous
May 21 2009, 18:46:31 UTC
Just as the sun set, America demonstrated the best horsemanship that Spain could possibly expect in such limited time, seeing as his student was mentally two years old and could not speak any language he knew. Sighing in regret, he decided that he could no longer put off the inevitable
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Re: Free As The Birds, Wild As The Winds [pt 8/8]
anonymous
May 21 2009, 19:57:16 UTC
This anon has followed this story faithfully to this conclusion, and is so, so glad she stuck with it. This is stunning. So absolutely touching and well-crafted from start to finish, and your beautiful grasp of prose never faltered--if there were weak points in the narration, I didn't spot them (and I am picky about my prose).
I love your descriptions, your characterization of Spain is so well-done: his interactions with Romano, which had started to grate on me after the 20th or so Spain/Romano fic with the exact same dynamics--you made his clueless responses believable, and you fleshed out a character that we really only see the goofy side of. I love that you gave him that touch of sentimentality and romanticism, and his rapport with America and his horse and the land and France (I love you for including France and for making it tense and ugly and so IC). And the ending was glorious
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Also Spain had to admit he did not always have a way with children I lol'd heartily.
Keep it coming, anon! ♥ I'll be over here stalking this fill. :DDD
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Stunning use of words. Everything flows so nicely. And here I was figuring that that prompt would never get filled... and wow... you've gone beyond what I've ever imagined.
Can't wait for the next part.
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I can't wait to see how this is going to turn out. Especially the horse part, but everything else as well. XD *waits patiently*
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Ahh the tensions in the story are rising... so exciting! This was every bit worth the wait (after all, quality over quantity... wait does that even make sense here?) and you also managed to work in the Native Americans too.
I adore how you're slowly building up everything instead of rushing right into it. It gives the whole thing a more realistic feel to it. =)
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“Espagne…”
Spain ignored the silken voice, keeping his gaze fixed outside. He did not look up as someone approached his seat by the windowsill, preceded by a faint scent of roses and musk. But Spain was never one to dawdle in court intrigue, so he asked sharply, “What do you want, Francia? Are we not at war?”
“Our kings are at war, oui,” France agreed, languid and careless as he patted the other’s shoulder out of familial concern. “But we are still brothers and friends, is that not so ( ... )
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“Que?” Spain asked, straightening up from the fighting stance cautiously, still remaining alert.
“It would be best if you attend to your colonies while you still can. And keep your nose out of our affairs.” He did not - could not - miss the double meaning there, and Spain scowled deeply at the implication. “You will not be alone in the New World from now on, and nothing you do is going to change that.”
Spain blinked, a sudden image of a small golden-haired infant flashing in his vision, and he felt a pang of guilt and bewilderment lancing through his heart.
“No, of course not…”
“If you understand, then fine.” The other nation tossed his hair and straightened his clothes as best as he could, frowning at an imaginary speck of dust on the dark fur cuffs of his coat. “Farewell, mon frere, I will see you again… Hopefully on better terms ( ... )
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I love your descriptions, your characterization of Spain is so well-done: his interactions with Romano, which had started to grate on me after the 20th or so Spain/Romano fic with the exact same dynamics--you made his clueless responses believable, and you fleshed out a character that we really only see the goofy side of. I love that you gave him that touch of sentimentality and romanticism, and his rapport with America and his horse and the land and France (I love you for including France and for making it tense and ugly and so IC). And the ending was glorious ( ... )
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