Fail!anon Author!anon started writing this fill at the link above, but after discussions with another anon and considerable soul-searching, decided a rewrite was in order. So I'm starting back at part one here. Also, the title has changed from "Flick Your Cigarette and Kiss Me" to "The Only Way Out is Through."
This fic involves multiple pairings, past and present, real and fantasized. Part of me doesn't want to give away all the pairings, but the other part of me knows most of you will want to know before starting to read. Please highlight here for the major pairings: Kiku/Alfred, Ivan/Alfred, Arthur/Alfred, Kiku/Alfred/Arthur.Finally, author!anon wishes to thank everyone who read the first version and especially to those who offered encouragement (and most especially to you who pointed out all the missed potential). I very much hope you will give this version a read
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the only way out is through (1/?)
anonymous
June 4 2009, 22:55:39 UTC
The Only Way Out is Through - part oneAlfred is not in love with Kiku. What they have is better than love. Alfred doesn't have a name for it. There probably is a name, but Alfred likes it like this: nameless, freedom in the namelessness
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the only way out is through (2/?)
anonymous
June 5 2009, 23:54:45 UTC
The Only Way Out is Through - part twoHeat and color rise to Alfred's face, which is not at all where he wants them to be. "Um," he says. Then he wonders if maybe his flush is exactly where it's supposed to be, since he understands humiliation can sometimes be a component in the kind of playing they've agreed to
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Gorgeous!anon here
anonymous
June 6 2009, 01:51:34 UTC
Ahaha, yes. I guessed the tea was drugged as soon as Kiku took off for the kitchen. The scene was way too suspiciously innocent. ♥
Kudos for the descriptions and the talk about the tea, I freaking love the stuff. And the wine-tasting bit made me giggle. Oh, Alfred. So smooth, so very smooth.
I'm so very happy you kept the lines where Kiku and Alfred are talking about setting their scene. I love, love the minimalism and the focus on gesture that you have going on there. Especially about Kiku and his calmness, since I don't read him much.
The rewrite looks incredibly promising, and I can't wait for the hot kinky sexings next part!
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anonymous
June 6 2009, 03:25:01 UTC
Thank you so much, gorgeous!anon! ♥ I knew sharp readers would guess before Alfred that something was up with the tea. I thought about trying to make that more subtle, but then it felt disingenuous so I went with this version. I hope you didn't feel let down by antipating the drugging?
I'm really happy you mentioned the minimalism. I think one of the problems, at least for me, with the first version was that the minimalism wound up rushing the narrative and I gave short shrift to some of the characters/relationships/emotions. What I'm hoping to achieve this time is a balance between the minimalism (which I also love) and some of the more rich, lush moments. We'll see if I can pull it off! I love the anonymity of this meme, which allows me the freedom and gives me the confidence to try stuff like this...even if you already know who I am. *wry grin*
Thank you again for reading and for your comments! ♥
Re: Gorgeous!anon here
anonymous
June 6 2009, 23:42:41 UTC
Oh, don't worry about the subtlety. It's perfect as it is, and I'm sure that not everyone will guess it. It made me very excited when I saw that my own guess was correct.
*returns the grin* My future comments may not be so coherent, you know. The original version was... I can't decide between "smokin' hot" and "gloriously sexy", so I'll say both. And I'm sure the rewrite can only get better!
Re: the only way out is through (2/?)
anonymous
June 6 2009, 15:04:20 UTC
I'm loving the direction you've started off the rewrite on. The pace is a lot slower, which is great, and I rather like this new tea scene you've added in. (adore alfred trying to find something to say about the tea) I see Kiku is already embarrassing Alfred a bit~ I like how unsure and eager you write Alfred and how that underlying streak of deviousness showing through for Kiku is already showing through.
Can't wait for the next parts~ I'm seriously loving the mood of it so far.
Re: the only way out is through (2/?)
anonymous
June 6 2009, 15:10:31 UTC
Whoa, that last sentence should read: I like how unsure and eager you write Alfred and how that underlying streak of deviousness of Kiku's is already showing through.
Re: the only way out is through (2/?)
anonymous
June 6 2009, 21:15:06 UTC
I like the new pace, too. I'm hoping I don't wind up diluting the impact of later scenes by playing out earlier scenes more fully, so your comments about the little I have so far are very encouraging. This is my first time writing Kiku and I think I may have been nervous in the first attempt at this fill, glossing over instead of getting into his character--which also diminished his relationship with Alfred.
Anyhow, I'm starting to ramble, so I'll stop here and thank you for reading and especially for your comments. ♥
the only way out is through (3/?)
anonymous
June 8 2009, 05:37:03 UTC
The Only Way Out is Through - part threeAlfred blinks. Blinks again. On the third blink, his vision starts to focus. He starts forward-but instead of moving, he feels a pull in his shoulders. He looks at his arms and realizes two things: they are bare, and his hands are tied behind his back. He looks down and sees that he has been stripped to the waist, and that his ankles are tied to the legs of the chair. Uncertainty yields to excitement. He wonders how long he has been like this already, and how long Kiku will continue to leave him here
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the only way out is through (4/?)
anonymous
June 8 2009, 07:17:13 UTC
Part 4As Kiku walks back to him, Alfred can see the object in his hand is a pack of cigarettes. Lucky Strikes, though Alfred hasn't seen that particular packaging in years. Alfred knows he didn't put the cigarettes there. Kiku sure is thorough; he even remembered Alfred's brand during the 40s. The cherry flares to life as Kiku lights up and inhales
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the only way out is through (5/?)
anonymous
June 8 2009, 17:20:17 UTC
The Only Way Out is Through - part fiveIn the next moment, Kiku is up, overturning the chair with Alfred still bound to it, slamming Alfred to the floor. Before Alfred can try to right himself, before he can move at all, he feels Kiku's firm hand; he feels the flat of a cool, smooth blade against his skin, sliding between his wrists as Kiku cuts through the bonds. Alfred brings his freed hands up beside him, but just as he's pushing himself up, the chair digs into him and he's forced down. Feeling the blade again, he guesses Kiku is leaning against the chair as he reaches down to cut the bonds at Alfred's ankles
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Re: the only way out is through (5/?)
anonymous
June 8 2009, 17:48:26 UTC
Oh my God.
I´ll have to get back at you on this, because I´m not coherent right now, this is so intense and the part about the cities was SO POWERFUL and augjkhgjdhgjh-
Re: the only way out is through (5/?)
anonymous
June 8 2009, 18:14:34 UTC
Author!anon thanks you most sincerely, and is especially pleased you felt the intensity in the part with the cities. That was meant to be a turning point for Alfred, where he forgot he was playing and relinquished himself to the scene itself, to the very horror he had asked Kiku to provide (even if he wasn't fully conscious of what he was asking for; Kiku is very good at reading Alfred).
the only way out is through (6/?)
anonymous
June 8 2009, 18:44:03 UTC
The Only Way Out is Through - part sixAlfred concentrates on breathing as Kiku comes around to stand in front of him once more. He prepares himself for their eyes to meet-but instead of looking him in the face, Kiku angles his gaze lower. Alfred looks down, too, and wonders how he can possibly feel such a blush in his face when all of his blood seems to be in his cock
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http://hetalia-kink.livejournal.com/6850.html?thread=10261442#t10261442
Fail!anon Author!anon started writing this fill at the link above, but after discussions with another anon and considerable soul-searching, decided a rewrite was in order. So I'm starting back at part one here. Also, the title has changed from "Flick Your Cigarette and Kiss Me" to "The Only Way Out is Through."
This fic involves multiple pairings, past and present, real and fantasized. Part of me doesn't want to give away all the pairings, but the other part of me knows most of you will want to know before starting to read. Please highlight here for the major pairings: Kiku/Alfred, Ivan/Alfred, Arthur/Alfred, Kiku/Alfred/Arthur.Finally, author!anon wishes to thank everyone who read the first version and especially to those who offered encouragement (and most especially to you who pointed out all the missed potential). I very much hope you will give this version a read ( ... )
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Kudos for the descriptions and the talk about the tea, I freaking love the stuff. And the wine-tasting bit made me giggle. Oh, Alfred. So smooth, so very smooth.
I'm so very happy you kept the lines where Kiku and Alfred are talking about setting their scene. I love, love the minimalism and the focus on gesture that you have going on there. Especially about Kiku and his calmness, since I don't read him much.
The rewrite looks incredibly promising, and I can't wait for the hot kinky sexings next part!
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I'm really happy you mentioned the minimalism. I think one of the problems, at least for me, with the first version was that the minimalism wound up rushing the narrative and I gave short shrift to some of the characters/relationships/emotions. What I'm hoping to achieve this time is a balance between the minimalism (which I also love) and some of the more rich, lush moments. We'll see if I can pull it off! I love the anonymity of this meme, which allows me the freedom and gives me the confidence to try stuff like this...even if you already know who I am. *wry grin*
Thank you again for reading and for your comments! ♥
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*returns the grin* My future comments may not be so coherent, you know. The original version was... I can't decide between "smokin' hot" and "gloriously sexy", so I'll say both. And I'm sure the rewrite can only get better!
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Can't wait for the next parts~ I'm seriously loving the mood of it so far.
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Sorry, just woke up and all.
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Anyhow, I'm starting to ramble, so I'll stop here and thank you for reading and especially for your comments. ♥
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I´ll have to get back at you on this, because I´m not coherent right now, this is so intense and the part about the cities was SO POWERFUL and augjkhgjdhgjh-
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Thank you again for reading! ♥
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