No, no, it isn't all right. [1a/?]
anonymous
July 9 2009, 08:23:02 UTC
England doesn't know why he's doing this.
The door to the Conference Room is open a crack; inside he sees other nations. They're a little early, him too, but he comes early for a reason this time.
In his hands, clutched tightly and wrinkling the white package is a bag of McDonald's. It's not too much, just a hamburger and fries. England feels kind of pathetic when he thinks about this, kind of wants to turn away, toss the bag and pretend it never happened, but he knows he'd be running away then.
Come on, McDonald's was America's favorite restaurant; of course he'd be happy if England buys it for him out of concern, right? He has to be. Even if his own American movies that England invited him to go to doesn't please him, this will! He loves hamburgers, after all.
The Briton pushes past all shame and walks in. People glance at him, then turn back to their normal chatter. It's just another nation coming early is all, what's the big deal?
America sits idly at his chair at the table, sipping coffee. There, there, he's right there,
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No, no, it isn't all right. [1b/?]
anonymous
July 9 2009, 08:24:12 UTC
“Thank you, England,” He says, “That's very considerate of you.” He reaches out to take the bag, but England pulls back, still watching America, still looking for something that will tell him America, that happy nation, the one that used to be his colony - isn't dead inside
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No, no, it isn't all right. [1c/?]
anonymous
July 9 2009, 08:28:14 UTC
He doesn't know how long it's been since he left, has the meeting started, are they looking for him - then again, that's the furthest from England's mind right now
( ... )
Re: No, no, it isn't all right. [1c/?]
anonymous
July 9 2009, 08:48:10 UTC
This is the artist!anon and the OP of this prompt (so complicated XD)
OH MY LORD. THIS IS... THIS... WHY AM I FEELING SO SORRY FOR YOU DESPITE WHAT YOU HAVE DONE, ARTHUR?
Dear OP/writer!anon, this is BEAUTIFUL. The way you described the scenes and emotions, I can just SEE them in my mind's eyes. When I realized that Arthur was crying and eating the burger, I have TEARS in my eyes. REAL TEARS. I am not just saying it. Your writing is absolutely amazing; thank you VERY much for writing this and I can't wait for more.
And no, you did not go off tangent. THIS IS PERFECT. BETTER THAN PERFECT.
Excuse the abusive use of cap, I cannot THINK right now.
P.S. No one saw that de-anon! (Why do I keep doing that damnit) P.P.S. recaptcha: THE past (yes with the cap)
No, no, it isn't all right. [2a/?]
anonymous
July 15 2009, 00:56:28 UTC
England still remembers when they went. It was him, France, and Canada. “You guys have been around him almost all his life.” was their reason to look for America, who missed two meetings in a row. It was unusual for him, who so rarely grew ill. That and, when you can't attend a meeting, you're obliged to call someone who is attending to notify everyone. America didn't call anyone
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No, no, it isn't all right. [2b/?]
anonymous
July 15 2009, 00:57:29 UTC
“Alfred!” Canada followed suit, and both he and France bent down, kneeling across from England, who had his hand buried under America's head, in his once-golden hair. He's pale, reflecting blue from the color of the TV. France got up and switched the lights on, and they came to realize how he looks
( ... )
Re: No, no, it isn't all right. [2c/?]
anonymous
July 15 2009, 02:23:16 UTC
I'm choking up but i'm trying not to tear up. I'm so glad this chapter came! I was waiting for it and for making me come close to tears, it was worth the wait. Please Continue soon, i really can't wait for the next chapter.
OP of this prompt
anonymous
July 15 2009, 10:11:16 UTC
MY HEART.
Anon, I felt like my heart has just been ripped out.
On one hand I wanted to sneer at England because, well, "so sorry for raping you" is just... COME ON. I LOVE how they acted like they had no idea what was wrong when they visited America *roll eyes*
On the other hand, I could not help but feel sorry for England, because the way you wrote him... I can READ his sincerity and his pain.
Re: No, no, it isn't all right. [2c/?]
anonymous
July 15 2009, 14:21:21 UTC
God, this chapter made me tear up more than the first one! I love your writing... you're very good at showing raw emotion in your writing (I personally, am jealous of you). I hope the next part comes soon, I really want to read it.
Re: No, no, it isn't all right. [2c/?]
anonymous
July 16 2009, 21:26:49 UTC
One thing I really, really love about this fill (aside from the amazing, cathartic way it's written, of course) is your take on the prompt. While most people interpret 'punishment' as some sort of physical punishment and/or torture of some sort, I love how you turned the idea on its head and turned America's hollow, 'dead' state after the incident into a sort of 'punishment' for the other nations, especially England. So kudos for thinking outside the box and for this fantastic piece of work. I'm eagerly anticipating more!
The door to the Conference Room is open a crack; inside he sees other nations. They're a little early, him too, but he comes early for a reason this time.
In his hands, clutched tightly and wrinkling the white package is a bag of McDonald's. It's not too much, just a hamburger and fries. England feels kind of pathetic when he thinks about this, kind of wants to turn away, toss the bag and pretend it never happened, but he knows he'd be running away then.
Come on, McDonald's was America's favorite restaurant; of course he'd be happy if England buys it for him out of concern, right? He has to be. Even if his own American movies that England invited him to go to doesn't please him, this will! He loves hamburgers, after all.
The Briton pushes past all shame and walks in. People glance at him, then turn back to their normal chatter. It's just another nation coming early is all, what's the big deal?
America sits idly at his chair at the table, sipping coffee. There, there, he's right there, ( ... )
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OH MY LORD. THIS IS... THIS... WHY AM I FEELING SO SORRY FOR YOU DESPITE WHAT YOU HAVE DONE, ARTHUR?
Dear OP/writer!anon, this is BEAUTIFUL. The way you described the scenes and emotions, I can just SEE them in my mind's eyes. When I realized that Arthur was crying and eating the burger, I have TEARS in my eyes. REAL TEARS. I am not just saying it. Your writing is absolutely amazing; thank you VERY much for writing this and I can't wait for more.
And no, you did not go off tangent. THIS IS PERFECT. BETTER THAN PERFECT.
Excuse the abusive use of cap, I cannot THINK right now.
P.S. No one saw that de-anon! (Why do I keep doing that damnit)
P.P.S. recaptcha: THE past (yes with the cap)
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recaptcha: FRANCE thighs, ohohoho
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Although it is kind of his fault, I feel so bad for him...
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I'm looking forward to seeing where you're going with this.
::bookmarks::
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Poor Alfred ;_;
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Anon, I felt like my heart has just been ripped out.
On one hand I wanted to sneer at England because, well, "so sorry for raping you" is just... COME ON. I LOVE how they acted like they had no idea what was wrong when they visited America *roll eyes*
On the other hand, I could not help but feel sorry for England, because the way you wrote him... I can READ his sincerity and his pain.
Now I am torn.
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And I think we all agree that writer!anon is wonderful... this far far far exceeded my expectation!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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