Okay I laughed when I realized it was a water gun. I REALLY HAD NO IDEA LOLOL;;;.
But still! That was really good. I really loved how Alfred gave Feliciano the choice to choose and Ludwig freaked out. And that bit about saving the killing for Russia, oh MAN. Alfred. ♥
I want Part 5 so bad now! ;AA; When he said “My grudge is against the ones who actually put their dicks in me.” He said calmly. I was like, "fdgjkfjfkk" cause. ARTHUR, FRANCIS, AND THE OTHERS kfjgkjds. Man, now I really really wanna see what'll happen when I think more cause I mean! Arthur had the most faith in Alfred, and looks what's happening and what just might happen to him.
-sobbbb- GREAT JOB. ;A; -gives you baskets of interwebz and hugs- Will be F5ing until the next part(s) come up!
$11-billion qualms 8U Sounds like the world right now, in a nutshell.
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anonymous
July 9 2009, 18:29:06 UTC
..that was epic. I love this part so much because Al is being so --- coolly, frighteningly intelligent about it. The torture here is going to LINGER isn't it. This was like -- Joker in TDK. It was mindgames and it was forcing a Sophie's Choice (of sorts) and now everyone, especially the Italy brothers, has to live with the knowledge that Feli wouldn't have saved Romano. He wouldn't have sacrificed himself. I mean, it's one thing to not expect it, it's another thing to KNOW your brother wouldn't.
This is a THRILLER and that last line makes me shiver. The nation-personifications yes -- but what is America, as a Nation and as his people, wielding the full economic and military power of the last superpower on earth, what is he going to do to their people? What is he NOT going to do? Is he withdrawing support?
Writer!anon here
anonymous
July 9 2009, 21:50:02 UTC
Haha... I actually haven't even seen TDK. Feliciano was freaking out. I think that had he been given a few hours to think, he would have sacrificed himself for his brother. At least, I'd like to think that.
This is a THRILLER
...I'm sad, now. As for the comment about the people of a Nation, to be perfectly honest, I really just intended it to be an insult. Your interpretation is very... delicious, and one that I'll have to take into consideration.
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anonymous
July 9 2009, 21:52:30 UTC
ahahah. Your fill is really good at making people think. I like it. I was imagining all over the world, Americans are suddenly really mistrustful and hostile towards foreigners....
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anonymous
July 10 2009, 21:45:25 UTC
I have to give it to you anon, this is pretty good. I keep on imagining Alfred with an insane smile whenever he is amused by what he's doing. I was a bit apprehensive about this prompt because the zeal for it makes me not a little uncomfortable but I read that it's a psychological thriller and I needed to read it. This kind of fic is my favorite to read in kink memes.
And, speaking writer to writer, I would recommend that you not have it end with anybody walking off into the sunset, so to speak. I think the story would have a greater effect if you kept with the thriller pacing. Happy writings anon! :)
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anonymous
July 11 2009, 16:31:11 UTC
Thank you! Your comment is very reassuring to me, because I've actually been kinda worried that I haven't been doing a good job. A psychological thriller... You have no idea how much that description pleases this writer!anon. I'm very fond of those kinds of stories, y'see.
Walking off into the sunset... You mean a romantic ending? I kind of want to grant the requests of a US/UK ending, but I sincerely doubt I can do that in this situation, because... well, truth be told, even though he's not acting like it, Alfred's kinda messed up in the head at the moment. And by the end of the story, quite a few of the other Nations will be, too. At no point did I consider having a fluffy, romantic ending, though. I have a plan for the ending that will hopefully make everyone (as in, the anons reading it) happy.
Holy mother of Mary, yes!!!
anonymous
July 11 2009, 03:22:41 UTC
I'll admit that I love the Financial Crisis Gangbang Comic/Taste of Revenge like a fat kid loves cake, but I wanted so badly to see Alfred get some vengeance on them.
I can't wait to see more! I love psychological torture, and the way he calls everyone out on their utter hypocrisy is a especially cathartic to see.
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anonymous
July 11 2009, 20:18:25 UTC
Several Nations gaped at him. This was not the America they knew. The America they knew understood more than anything that a Nation’s people were more precious to them than anything. To casually deride the people of another Nation is one of the greatest insults among their kind.
Gilbert, who no longer had people to call his own, was the first to recover.
“Well, if West’s people are rapists, then what does that say about your people based on what you‘re doing?” He gave Alfred a sneer from the table he was strapped to
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I figured he would get screwed over by Alfred too since he didn't do anything to save him.
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Okay I laughed when I realized it was a water gun.
I REALLY HAD NO IDEA LOLOL;;;.
But still! That was really good. I really loved how Alfred gave Feliciano the choice to choose and Ludwig freaked out. And that bit about saving the killing for Russia, oh MAN. Alfred. ♥
I want Part 5 so bad now! ;AA; When he said “My grudge is against the ones who actually put their dicks in me.” He said calmly. I was like, "fdgjkfjfkk" cause. ARTHUR, FRANCIS, AND THE OTHERS kfjgkjds. Man, now I really really wanna see what'll happen when I think more cause I mean! Arthur had the most faith in Alfred, and looks what's happening and what just might happen to him.
-sobbbb- GREAT JOB. ;A; -gives you baskets of interwebz and hugs- Will be F5ing until the next part(s) come up!
$11-billion qualms 8U Sounds like the world right now, in a nutshell.
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This is a THRILLER and that last line makes me shiver. The nation-personifications yes -- but what is America, as a Nation and as his people, wielding the full economic and military power of the last superpower on earth, what is he going to do to their people? What is he NOT going to do? Is he withdrawing support?
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This is a THRILLER
...I'm sad, now. As for the comment about the people of a Nation, to be perfectly honest, I really just intended it to be an insult. Your interpretation is very... delicious, and one that I'll have to take into consideration.
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God I'm speaking Californian, again...
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Awesome, awesome story so far. I can't wait until you update this!
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And, speaking writer to writer, I would recommend that you not have it end with anybody walking off into the sunset, so to speak. I think the story would have a greater effect if you kept with the thriller pacing. Happy writings anon! :)
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Walking off into the sunset... You mean a romantic ending? I kind of want to grant the requests of a US/UK ending, but I sincerely doubt I can do that in this situation, because... well, truth be told, even though he's not acting like it, Alfred's kinda messed up in the head at the moment. And by the end of the story, quite a few of the other Nations will be, too. At no point did I consider having a fluffy, romantic ending, though. I have a plan for the ending that will hopefully make everyone (as in, the anons reading it) happy.
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I can't wait to see more! I love psychological torture, and the way he calls everyone out on their utter hypocrisy is a especially cathartic to see.
MORE MORE MORE!!!!!
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Gilbert, who no longer had people to call his own, was the first to recover.
“Well, if West’s people are rapists, then what does that say about your people based on what you‘re doing?” He gave Alfred a sneer from the table he was strapped to ( ... )
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