our lawyer made us

[heyginger]

So the problem is that I keep looking at the inside of Pete's wrist in the following picture:

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[azurejay]

if you spot any glaring mistakes

Um. No.

(Well, okay, my OCD is like "commas before quotation marks," but seriously. It's too hot to complain.)

(Also, I knew there was a reason I liked that picture--besides the um blackwork black hair black eyes black courduroy omg--and now I know what it is. Hands! Wrists! Elbows! Thank you ever so.)

(One last thing: oh Patrick. *swoon*)

[heyginger]

"commas before quotation marks,"

Ok, I am apparently blind because I cannot find this! But you know how it is with stuff you've written, sometimes, where you...it would be "can't see the trees for the forest" I suppose. But the quotation mark is my punctuation nemesis, so I don't doubt you.

Also, thank you! Also, it is a nice picture, right? And he has very, very nice fingers.

[heyginger]

Way to use html, Rin. Way to go. Gold star.

[azurejay]

*thumbs up*

Pete says “I have a meeting. After lunch. I should go.”

There should be a comma after "says" there--and in every case. Granted, I've just realised that you're telling us how the story would/will go, so it could be all postmodern and shit, which blah. Don't even get me started on how postmodernism breaks my brain by making me feel dumb when I don't notice it happening.

I love commas! And semi-colons! And dashes! If you hadn't noticed!

Lovely fingers. I love hands with character.

[1001cranes]

Between lawyer!Pete and devil!Pete, I am A BIG PILE OF LOVING SMOOSH. Er. Whatever that means.

<3

[heyginger]

devil!Pete hates me! I swear, the fucker keeps running away. It's because he's evil.

But thank you!

[1001cranes]

Aw, Devil!Pete! Do not run away!

[overloved]

this is awesomer and awesomer.

[heyginger]

Thanks! You're always so supportive, which I think makes you awesomer and awesomer.

[overloved]

i love your writing. i want more.

[gigantic]

They're just so! I can't, like! GAH. *spent*

[heyginger]

They want to be written. The way it's going, maybe I can just write the whole thing backwards and be done with it!

[miss_saigon]

Okay Patrick removing Pete's tie and cufflinks is possibly the hottest thing ever. I'm so in love with this universe.

[heyginger]

I agree totally about the tie and cufflinks, although I'm not sure I did the hotness justice (I'm not sure anything short of actually watching it happen in front of me would do it justice). And thanks so much!