asdfREVIEW TO YOUR FIC!the_tonberryMay 27 2008, 21:05:34 UTC
(I'm reviewing here because, quite frankly, I can't remember my old FF.Net password. I'm too lazy to go look for it now.)
I feel great joy at the notion of BeVin smut. GREAT JOY.
Piece of constructive crit (if you want it): Sometimes, you don't separate bits of dialogue. Startinf a new line when switching between different characters works well.
Other than that, I had no beef with your fic! Can't wait for the sm-
Wow! I can't believe I didn't figure it out! I love this show! 8D But seriously-WTF, producers? What where you thinking when you decided to have Ben get married to Kai? D<
Oh, you aren't pedo. XD ...Unless your over twenty. THEN your pedo. >D
Alright! I'm good for another like 3 years XD yosh!!! I hate Kai... and Julie... So very hardcore like... >.< I also hate Gwen... but the older Gwen isn't too bad... But Ben Kevin and Max are my favorites ^-^
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I feel great joy at the notion of BeVin smut. GREAT JOY.
Piece of constructive crit (if you want it): Sometimes, you don't separate bits of dialogue. Startinf a new line when switching between different characters works well.
Other than that, I had no beef with your fic! Can't wait for the sm-
...Rest of the fic. Yeah...Rest of the fic...
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http://i187.photobucket.com/albums/x66/Midesko/kev.jpg
:D I'm still working on writing so just bear with me >.
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"Should we fix this?"
You kill me, luv. I dropped my big-ass history textbook on my foot because I was laughing so hard.
Mucho love for this!
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I did that with a full can of soda and my nail was purple for ever XD
I put up allot more on my deviantart!!
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and its from Ben 10 cuz im a pedo like that XD
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Oh, you aren't pedo. XD ...Unless your over twenty. THEN your pedo. >D
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I hate Kai... and Julie... So very hardcore like...
>.<
I also hate Gwen... but the older Gwen isn't too bad...
But Ben Kevin and Max are my favorites ^-^
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