20/35 Paper Planes [Kiseop/Kibum]

[historysworst]

20. Paper Planes [Kiseop/Kibum]

We tread softly,

Spoke only in whispers,

For at any moment the world around us would shatter,

It did, like a broken heart,

It’s like I’m in a bad dream and I’ve dragged you in with me.

And I fear we won’t wake up.

I can’t save you.

You are going to die because of me.

I’m not afraid,

Even the world has died before,

we know this

Comments

[s2_otter]

Why are they dying? What have they committed?
What crime?

Was the last one in narrator's POV?
I loved the story, no, this isn't bad at all!
This is beautiful and no where near cliche, and you used the paper planes thing greatly, this was really great. :)

Gosh, you make me at a loss of what to do with my prompt XD
And the last line is so precious!~~

[historysworst]

well.... kiseop said it was a life for a life, which means somebody got killed... so the were supposed to be sentenced to die for it.
i didnt really want to put too much detail about that part, cause everything is supposed to be what kibum was able to tell the guard in the walk to scaffold....
so yes it was supposed to be in the narrators pov in the end....

thank you lol
i really am scared of posting things i write cause it usually only makes sense in my head -___-

the last line.....
my favorite movie when i was like 6 said something like that i can never remember what it was.
it was something about marrying a prince and living happily ever after. idk. it just always stuck with me.

thank you so much for reading and giving me some advice =D

[s2_otter]

Oh :(
But I wouldn't think of them as someone who could kill /sighs
Maybe someone framed them.

Don't thank me, and please gain courage.
It doesn't only make sense in your head :)
It's good, sometimes you just have to describe more and this much is actually great already :D

Awww, must be a really good movie :D
I wish I could give you more proper advice, but you're a better writer than I am so I better shut up lol.

[historysworst]

they werent framed exactly...
it was kind of a we have no other option situation.
haha the story is wayy too complicated.

lol i'll still say thanks anway

[tinyscribbles80]

T_T

[historysworst]

that bad lol?

[tinyscribbles80]

NUUUUU!!!! its not bad! heartbreaking coz I mean can you just imagine how sad it is to actually get stuck in that kind of situation. Never mind what happened to them to get themselves in there. But its that moment that makes it really... T_T poor babies.

....

What am I saying? of course you can imagine it *rolls eyes* you're the one who wrote it.

[historysworst]

oh okay, i understand.

it is definitely sad =/
especially since i love both of them,
i tried to make it a little less depressing, but...

lol even though i wrote it, it can seem even sadder when you see how other people imagine what you've wrote, if someone else can feel the pain, then it becomes more real, i guess