New Poem

[hkil99]

I wrote a new poem, but, I don't have a title for it yet.  Some input would be wonderful.  Please and thank you!

Why do you love me?
I am no good for you
Why do you want me?
I can't be who you once knew
Why do you care?
I am not the person for you
What's the draw?
What's the lure?
Am I just a sickness for which is no cure?
You breathe life in me
I take your

Comments

[jehane_writes]

Hey, Heath! This poem is so lovely, I dig the rhythm and the rawness of the sentiments. I especially liked

What's the draw?
What's the lure?
Am I just a sickness for which is no cure?

where the rhyme and meter particularly worked.

as to title, might I suggest "Work in Progress", as one of the bright lines in the poem?

(Also, am not sure why we're not friends! Imma friend you, k?)

Jay x

[hkil99]

Thanks, bb! Yeah, this is one of my passions. I love to write. Poetry mostly. I have written some other things, but, I am best at poetry.

I really like that title. I didn't think about that.

I do have other poems posted here. A few, not all of what I have written.

And, that is absolutely fine! I don't know why we haven't friended before either. I have seen you around LJ for the better part of 2 years now. :D I will accept your friending! LOL!

[jehane_writes]

LOL, I've been on elJay for less than a year, since May 2009 - but it's two calendar years and it sure feels like longer! I've had a great time with everyone in Cook fandom <333