Concrit Post 19

[hmd_me]

How's My Driving?
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∞ Reply to other people's comments (anon or logged in) with constructive criticism.
∞ Learn from the suggestions and profit!

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[double_dynamite]

Tabitha Smith: double_dynamite
Hellboy<3 : right_of_doom
Morpheus: he_who_shapesus
James Watson jd_watson
Jason Haben stand_and_burn
Theodore Bradson dirt_bloodsmile
Bullseye aim_forthesoul
Piotr Rasputin metal_of_heart
Annette De Tau (even though she's new XD) pride_of_africa
Doug 'Pisces' Brooks runninoutowater

[double_dynamite]

You have some really interesting characters in SWS and I especially like threadstalking your Bullseye. The thing I notice consistently in your posts is that you use "your" when you want "you're (you are)". It's a relatively small thing and I know a lot of people do it, but if you're looking for things to improve, that's something I can point out.

[right_of_doom]

Thank you! I shall be slowly trying to make me grammar less fail<3

[time_schizo]

Writing this early in the morning, so excuse any incoherency. What to say about your characters that I haven't already said? You do a wonderful job with all of them, and it's refreshing to see characters no one else would think of picking up like Tabby and Bullseye. And you know how refreshing I find it to see OCs who aren't just more of the same old young pretty types.

Now for the almighty critique. Dun dun dun. Well, I have to say, you have the bad habit of switching between present and past tense sometimes in between posts on the same thread. Check the current one between Teddy and Martini for a good example. It's not too big a deal, but it's something you could improve on. Also, the comma, which is the bane of my existence, could be used a little more frequently. Just remember, these are little technicalities, and overall, you are a great RPer. I <3 ya!

[double_dynamite]

Gracias on all accounts, any tips on how to manage the present and past tense thing a little better?

lalala changing accounts don't mind me....

[hunteroffreaks]

First off, check to see what tense your RP partner is using and match it. Personally, I always use past, "said" instead of "says" or "saying." After that, just make an effort to sure all the tenses match in the sentence, "sat up" instead of "sits up", "called" instead of "calls or "calling", etc.

[i_suffocate]

Even though he's not listed, I love Jay! :D