Concrit Post 5

[hmd_meme]

How's My Driving?

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Comments

[gonsai]

Here's the full list.

Though, if you're lazy, here's a sample of my works:

from bleach_dressing:
inukitake = altered!Jushirou Ukitake from sieben_rpg. Has dog ears and tail
coachzaraki = high school AU!Kenpachi Zaraki from clairbourn. Has no powers, but is still a hardass
tempestabianca = AU!Jushirou Ukitake from onorata
tight_like_kubo = Kubo Tite, parody of the creator of Bleach
frostedheaven = Female!Hitsugaya, Toshiko Hitsugaya
capnteebee = altered!Jushirou Ukitake from luceti. Has a pair of red wings, inflicted with visual agnosia, and can use extremely powerful lightning-based magic.

from sieben_rpg:
inukitake = Jushirou Ukitake, Bleach
bleuthunder = Ky Kiske, Guilty Gear
stardust_legacy = Jotaro Kujo, Jojo's Bizarre Adventure: Stone Ocean
rapier_ex = Virginia Maxwell, Wild ARMs 3

from luceti:
hello_boss = Doppio/Diavolo/Soliddo Nazo, Jojo's Bizarre Adventure: Golden Wind
bigbluehat = Sasarai, Suikoden III
mutsukabezaka = Rohan Kishibe, Jojo's Bizarre Adventure: Diamond is Unbreakable

from discedo:
7th_warrant = Testament, Guilty Gear
the_icey_void = Vanilla Ice, Jojo's Bizarre Adventure: Stardust Crusaders
tenkai_soul = Tir McDohl, Suikoden I
daddyslilpyro = Lucca Ashtear, Chrono Trigger

from super_powers:
backseat_dragon = Ashton Anchors, Star Ocean

from city_of_versus:
dynamic_may_lee = "May" Lee Jinju, King of Fighters

from hereinrobothell:
tyrant_ambition =

[gonsai]

Nothing against any of your characters, but your attitude needs some serious work. The fact that I have to go anon to say this should tell you something.

[gonsai]

Can I get some examples, anon?

Oh, and no, you didn't have to go anon to say this, but whatever.

[inpew]

You characters all have a strong base. Very strong, actually.

I like how you do Rohan, but I think there should be a little more spontaneity in what he does. Nonetheless, I like how you convey his sensitivity and moodiness.

I'd give crit for Doppio/Diavolo, but the wonky translations of their dialogue make it really hard to say!

[gonsai]

I can definitely work on having him be more random. It's a bit hard to do so without him appearing out of touch.

AND IMAGINE HOW HARD IT MAKES HIM TO PLAY?! Part Five in general needs a dialog tune-up.

[inpew]

I can believe that. I'd say follow up with Thus Spoke Rohan's version, but he's older in it, and very distant.

oh god the 5's translations is so.... so.... hauhfau I swear to god. it's very, very confusing when the SCENES have to make you think as it is.

Is anyone in Vento Aureo relatively easy to play?

[gonsai]

Yeah, trying to stick with what I can play easiest, so it's Duwanghan for now. If or when the Louvre manga is published, scanned, and translated, I may change things up (plus ICONS), but for now, I have this. He just published his first manga in Luceti, so that should help things along.

Well, the villains aren't actually THAT hard to play, save Doppiovolo. Narancia, Fugo, and Abbachio aren't too dificult either. Bruno, Giorno, Trish, and Mista are probably the hardest to play just right.

[inkblade]

Let's see...I like that you seem to have a good variety/versatility in all the many character you play (even if I have only interacted with a handful of them). Maybe I should branch out so I can see a few more of 'em in action.

I still remember you (and your Ukitake) as one of the first people to interact with me back at Dusk when I was something of a noob. I know you've got attitude but you've always kind of put me at ease when joining a new game, and I've enjoyed being able to banter back and forth both IC and OOC every now and again, so yeah.

I'd put one of these up so you can let me know how MY driving is but you'd probably be the only person who'd reply cause I'm still relatively anonymous in the RP world.

[gonsai]

I'll give it a look, Lili. I can't say what you're doing off or bad, but I sure as hell can tell you what you're doing well. I'll be sure to respond.

And thanks for this. It's helpful to know I haven't turned some people away with my attitude.

[inkblade]

Ok, it's up, whenever you get around to it. No rush.

You're welcome. As I've said, Versus (and the Onobox) is pretty much the only place I'm active anymore because of various other drama, so I figured I should make my appreciation known. lol