Concrit Post 9

[hmd_meme]

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[random_prophet]

what, when the fuck did this happen.

LATE AS USUAL

theskytides
Manfred von Karma (Ace Attorney) - karmauberalles
Major Ocelot (Metal Gear Solid) - but_inevitable
Prussia/Gilbert Weillschmidt (Axis Powers Hetalia) - freds_and_wills
Momo Hinamori (Bleach) - peachesnotplums

pokeology_rp
Manfred von Karma (Ace Attorney) - vksaurus_perfex
Giovanni (Pokemon Special) - of_the_land

violethill_rp
King Bradley/Wrath (Fullmetal Alchemist) - notrueking

paedeia
Selim Bradley/Pride (Fullmetal Alchemist) - ofallsins

gargleblasted
Selim Bradley/Pride (Fullmetal Alchemist) - dadsprideandjoy

...what have I even

[mysterymachines]

um yeah so

I'm in two games with you and stalk two more.

Re: Selim, I know he's supposed to be older and a human in Paedeia. In the dream world, he seems like a character his age, but when dealing with others he's a little too cute for a fourteen-year-old, even a fourteen-year-old who looks young and is faking a cute act. He seems like himself as his canon self in Blasted, though (granted I only read FMA once and that was a long time ago). He's such a delicious little shit there. I don't want you to app him at Amat anymore; you lose your powers, so he can't tentacle-rape anybody.Lord Bradley~ I think you created an interesting human AU for him, and I think that you've got a good grasp on his voice and interactions with others (Detective Shota is as annoyed by him as Fullmetal XDDDD). I'm a little curious as to his headspace, though, since he has none of the same canon motivations. I should probably read his AU history again, but just keep your mind on what's motivating him. (also I owe you a tag on our log, if I haven't

[random_prophet]

ilyourcrit ♥

I'll definitely try and keep that in mind for Paedeia!Selim. Do you have any thoughts on how I could... tone the cuteness back? (tbh I'm kind of thinking Honey from Ouran when I'm playing his fake personality).

Headspace is a liiittle complicated for Bradley, mainly because canon is really vague on wtf he's thinking in canon. I guess I'm unconsciously hesitating a little because we're probably going to get answers on that soon and I don't want to end up jossed next month (or the month after) into being too AU as opposed to... different goals, similar-ish motivations.

And yeah, I'm definitely going to keep that in mind.

[mygunsareon]

Hunny is mostly appealing to teenage shotacon fangirls, though, and that's who his act is targeted towards. For Selim, try to think of the kind of little brother that, say, you would want to have. I can't help you with that because I actually have a younger brother, so your picture will probably be better because it's more idealized.

Understood about Bradley. I hope that next month is the whole Greed/Wrath fight; it seems like the kind of fight where the villain exposits as he beats the other guy up.

[dadsprideandjoy]

Yeaaah, that makes sense. Will keep in mind ♥

Yeah, I do too. I imagine it'll be half Greed/Wrath, half creepy guy with glasses.