Concrit Post 14

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How's My Driving?

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[alwaysadoctor]

@ dramadramaduck
Pavel Chekov | whogavemethevs

@ elegycity
Leonard McCoy | bluecaduceus

sixwordstories, treksixwords, freeform and the like
Winona Kirk | icanfixitall (though, if you know her mirrors, feel free to comment on them too.)
Nyota Uhura | all3dialects
Leonard McCoy (Post Five Year Mission) | ilosttheplanet
Number One | a_firmus_animus
Leonard McCoy (Teenage Version) | alwaysadoctor

Literally, any work you think I need to do on them, tell me it, please, because I'm feeling off about everyone lately.

[no_dryer_box]

For Winnie: I love Winnie. I guess the only thing I can think of is that she her language sounds too formal sometimes. Not like academically formal, more like older language formal. I hope that makes sense.

What I do like about the character is that she's older, her relationship with her boys/George's death does not consume her. There's no denying it's a part of who she is and how she deals with her life, but it isn't constant.

For Number One: I really like the way she fits with Pike. That's about it.

[icanfixitall]

Older language, like my disturbing use of the word shall instead of will and stuff like that? Because I'm trying not to make her sound academically formal, because lord knows I do that enough on accident with Nyota when I have her near any Spock, but if she's sounding to older language formal then I obviously need to stop those shenanigans.

And I think one of the only reasons she doesn't is because I don't normally have threads with Jims and well, you know I play George too, so of course that won't happen.

And that last bit one #1 makes me decidedly happy.

[no_dryer_box]

Yeah, I think it's "shall" but that's it really.

I think the fact that it doesn't take over her life makes sense, as much as it hurt her to lose George, or hurt her kids, it's been over 20 years since a lot of that happened.

:-D #1!

[hesdead_jim]

I love you. Maybe that isn't helpful, but Winnie especially is a favorite of mine to roleplay with. Some mornings when I'm tagging you, I'm tagging you and you alone because rping with you gets me in a good mood for the day. I love everything we do together, and think Winona is the best Winona out there, by far. She's well rounded and - thank the lord - didn't turn a blind eye to abuse or any other rubbish people have Winona play like. I don't see it, and am so thankful you don't have that aspect to her character.

In conclusion? You = ♥

[all3dialects]

That actually helps a lot more than you may think it does, because that kind of makes me smile and is at least a little reassuring.

♥

[all3dialects]

One of these days our schedules will align like the planets align and we'll actually get to play more often. ♥ (And I'm really hoping that day isn't the day the world decides to go poof.)

[daredtodo]

*headtilt* Is Chekov at DDD new/old/just never been noticed by the Captain?