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Fic: A Perfect Circle - "Ash Nazg" Challenge

Oct 30, 2006 10:58

Name: danachan
Title: A Perfect Circle
Challenge: Hobbit Smut "Ash Nazg" Challenge
Word Count: 5,847
Rating: NC-17
Pairings: Frodo/Merry, Merry/Pippin
Warnings: Slash, sexual content, rape, other dark themes
Summary: But you loved him first, you loved him best. You still do.
Notes: I signed up for this challenge right away and gladly picked Merry, ( Read more... )

Comments 17

sophinisba November 3 2006, 02:00:23 UTC

What I love about this, you know (besides the wrongness that hurts so good and also your way of writing which is awesome) is that it's so very like Merry, at least as I like to imagine him, to love Frodo just a little bit more than he should, and to take this responsibility and this burden on himself because he thinks that's the way to protect him. I can totally see this, the way things get out of his hands precisely because he's trying too hard to keep it all under control. I also love the anguish when he starts to realize how horribly it's gone wrong.

I am so glad you were able to write this and share it with everybody after all even though it was hard for you to do.

danachan November 6 2006, 13:58:40 UTC

It was very hard to write this and it didn't turn out the way I wanted it to - actually, I still feel pretty bad for it ending the way it did. But, you know, if it wasn't meant to happen like this then it wouldn't have wanted to be written this way. Right? Right?

But anyhow...

I can totally see this, the way things get out of his hands precisely because he's trying too hard to keep it all under control. I also love the anguish when he starts to realize how horribly it's gone wrong.

Exactly omg.

Thank you once more for reading this and for helping me with it the way you have. ♥

celandine_g November 5 2006, 21:01:49 UTC

This was a fascinating story of obsession, the power of the Ring, and how it could twist Merry's love for Frodo into something dark and evil. I especially loved the interior voice narrating it--very clever and unusual way to convey the depth of feeling and how far into it Merry really was.

I absolutely loved this story and the emotional effect it had on me. Very nice job.

danachan November 6 2006, 14:01:33 UTC

When I first started this, the story actually wasn't supposed to be in the second person. After trying to start it more times than I care to remember, I gave up on it and quite suddenly came back to the premise after thinking it dead and gone... I was surprised at the second person, but I really do think it makes the story work where it was only failing before.

I'm very glad you read this and that you loved it the way you did, and thank you for letting me know. It was a troubling story to write, but I'm glad I've let it out.

Again, thank you.

celandine_g November 6 2006, 15:12:42 UTC

Interesting comments!

Most writers have experienced that "one little thing" that finally makes it work. So it's great to have you express your struggle--for the edification of all of us. And sometimes it's just best to put something to rest for a time--until you can make it into what it deserves. Although it's hard to admit that something is not working, a mature writer will do so and find another way. And you did! :)

aussiepeach November 10 2006, 14:23:55 UTC

Whoa Nellie. How strange to be glad Merry gave the Ring to Pip - and yet how wrong! Very dark. Some things are scary as Balrogs, and that kind of situation is one of them.

danachan November 12 2006, 15:32:16 UTC

This really is a very scary situation, and of course it's very wrong. I'm very glad you read it! It was a troubling thing to get written, but it worked out better than it could have.

elanorgardner November 20 2006, 05:05:56 UTC

I want to use my "Cousins" icon because -- oh my -- the cousins caught in this awful, terrifying triangle. You have done it again my dear. And why you EVER doubt your talent, I will never know. *shakes a finger at you*

I love the use of second person here. So eerie, but perfect for the strange dance of sanity going on in Merry's mind. Your story and Carole's are so alike and yet different. Giving us a view into love warped sideways into something twisted and tormented -- something strangely beautiful and terrifying.

Awful. And I do mean full of awe. Thanks so much for participating in the challenge.