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Fic: Birthday Present - 'Ash Nazg' Challenge

Nov 03, 2006 12:53

Author: nickeyb
Title: Birthday Present
Challenge: Hobbit Smut ‘Ash Nazg’ Challenge
Word Count: 3,412
Rating: PG
Pairing: Frodo/Merry (implied)
Warnings: Character death.
Summary: Everything at Bag End is perfect, isn’t it? But wouldn’t you know - the devil’s always in the details.
Notes: Roopie belongs to Baylor, I hope she doesn’t mind me mentioning it ( Read more... )

Comments 20

jewelsong November 3 2006, 14:39:17 UTC

Oh my! This is excellent! I literally caught my breath when I got to the end! Well done indeed!

teawith November 6 2006, 00:23:13 UTC

Thank you. I wanted it to be just the same. Everything the same, except with a hint of wrongness. I think they're the best horror stories - hope I suceeded a bit...

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teawith November 6 2006, 00:24:15 UTC

Thanks! Although I must admit, I wasn't as happy with it as I could have been. My hobbit voice is becoming harder these days...

cookiefleck November 4 2006, 01:30:44 UTC

You broke my heart at the end but it was worth it... great story. *sobs for Sam*

teawith November 6 2006, 00:27:07 UTC

It didn't quite fit in with the fic as it ended up written, but I was going to have Merry throw Sam in the well once he was unconscious, since drowning Frodo's loved ones seemed to resonate in this fic. Although possibly that is TMI - very sorry, if so!

cookiefleck November 6 2006, 05:46:44 UTC

Yikes! No, not TMI... I love Sam and I love h/c, even without the "c" - heh - so whatever you wanted to throw at me would have been fine. But I think you made an excellent literary choice to end it as you did... much more effective.

Hmmm, reminds me a little of Shirley Jackson (and that's a huge compliment!).

sophinisba November 4 2006, 04:14:34 UTC

Wow, that was fantastic! I got really caught up in it, especially the last scene. I love Merry dearly and I think for that reason I really enjoyed being scared of him. I'm so glad you wrote this!

teawith November 6 2006, 00:28:23 UTC

I'm not sure it came across as written, but I think I would always be the most scared of Merry, if he took the ring - he's so *efficient*. A truly scary prospect.

mariole November 4 2006, 06:47:49 UTC

Wow! Creeeeeeepy Merry. What will they all do after Sam disappears. Run, Pippin, run! You'll be next! *hides someplace far away*

teawith November 6 2006, 00:31:02 UTC

Only if Pippin works it out, which he might, after Sam dies... And then Merry will have to be more drastic, and... Well, it doesn't end well. How can it?

mariole November 6 2006, 04:00:30 UTC

Precisely so. More, more! *pounds table*