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homefry1377

Fire & Water - Chapter 4

Nov 19, 2007 23:29

A/N: I was able to finish doing a read through of chapter 4 before vacation, so here you go. Enjoy ( Read more... )

Comments 12

applequartz November 20 2007, 06:06:17 UTC

I havent been leaving comments or feedback, so I suck.....
BUT...
I am now!
I really, really like this so far.
I loved the confrontation between Katara and Sokka.
I normally don't like dialog heavy fics, but it works here.
^__^
yay!

homefry1377 November 20 2007, 13:57:40 UTC

Thank you, it really means a lot to see what the reader is thinking. I'm really happy you're liking it, especially since it is very dialogue heavy. Katara turned out to have a huge potty mouth, didn't she...

applequartz November 21 2007, 00:45:17 UTC

She did.
But I think its more from sour grapes than from anything else.
^__^

homefry1377 November 21 2007, 05:11:48 UTC

Very true. She was still in shock, so you can't really blame her.

crabtreeblue November 22 2007, 07:42:42 UTC

Wow, Katara is quite a potty mouth!

Toph is so funny. “Dammit! Why do I have to be the blind one?”

homefry1377 November 23 2007, 03:12:37 UTC

I know! I was like, "Dude, Katara, watch your mouth" but the swears just kept coming.

Toph is so a slash fan girl, it's like woah.

kai_pon November 23 2007, 23:23:59 UTC

I really like this fic. But sometimes it's hard to know who is speaking. Maybe you should put some "Sokka said" or "Katara yelled" in it. But that's all.
Hope the next chapter is on soon, because it's a really good fanfiction *thumbs up*

homefry1377 November 24 2007, 04:41:27 UTC

Thank you so much for the feedback. I was worried about that, so I'll see what I can do about the dialogue for the next couple chapters. I'm very glad you're enjoying it.

AWESOME! thecinera November 26 2007, 01:12:34 UTC

The subject line says it! I Love this! When will the next chapter be posted?

Also, I'd like to see more stage directions, the constant dialogue is confusing.

Thanks for adding me, btw. Love this fic. Keep up the good work.

Re: AWESOME! homefry1377 November 26 2007, 01:20:32 UTC

Thanks, dude. I'm finishing up chapter 5 right now, and should be posted in a couple minutes.

I'm working on that... And the dialogue should be less confusing in this next one, I really hope it is...

No problem, I'll friend anyone who asks... Unless you start to stip up trouble, then I might have ta get rid of ya, since you're such a trouble maker... :P

d_artemis24 December 5 2007, 02:20:29 UTC

JERRY! JERRY! JERRY!
....I'm sorry, I couldn't resist.

homefry1377 December 5 2007, 17:25:07 UTC

It really did seem like that, didn't it? Good thing we had Toph the slasher as security.