kisses like knives

[hopie_cat]

For hanakotoba_fic , though it's not finished -- I thought I'd post it here, get some concrit. I have writer's block, and everything I write's not turning out well. So. Concrit, please. If you could. Comments, questions, anything really.

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Comments

[neocloud9]

OH MY GOD~

Will's so adorable when he's worried. Stuttering! ;w;

[naoki_hime]

I love it, darling :O

[hanakotoba_fic]

First: ah, so you did write it after all!

Second: the shift from the Ritz to the hotel room seems too sudden; first we see Grell in his element, so to speak, and suddenly he's elsewhere, injured, with William. I'd change this beginning somehow. But, I'm not sure how you could- you can remove it, write another one, or add onto what you have here, I suppose.

I'm interested in seeing this when it's finished. ^^