I crossed out the wrong parts and then corrected them in parentheses:
Hardy uses violence in his novel in order to enhance the story and make in (it) more believable.
However, a (the) reader realizes that Tess does not love Alec...
This aversion Tess holds towards (Tess's aversion to) Alec leaves her available to marry Angel--I'm not sure, but I think that might sound more correct...I keep thinking of your "aversion to stickers" ^__^
During and after the rape, Tess’s mental condition deteriorated. While she could still function, there is obvious differences between her and the people she knows. This change in her thoughts and personality were both what attracted Angel to her, and what gave her the ability to commit murder. However, after Angel finds out that she is not ‘pure’, she is unfairly punished for what Alec did to her. Thus, Alec’s raping of Tess was important to the novel because it set up openings through which Hardy could continue his story. This whole section just needs to be put in present tense. The sentence before
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In his novel Tess of the D’urbervilles, Hardy uses violent scenes in order to further his story. I think you need to specifically say something about plot. Just saying "further his story" sounds weird to me.
One of the first violent scenes Hardy includes is the one in which Tess is raped by Alec D’urberville. Say "in which Alec D'Urberville rapes Tess" to make it stronger, or pro active, or something. Grammar check for word says that all the time.
...there is obvious differences between her and the people she knows. Should be "are" instead of "is". Refers to "differences"
Another, smaller violent scene was when Tess slapped Alec with her glove. I don’t like "Another, smaller violent scene..." It could be “Another less violent scene”. At least take out the comma; I think that would be better.
The fact that Tess slapped Alex Shouldn't it be Alec?
Yes, that sentence makes sense
Tess does not seem to realize- or, if she does realize, she does not care- that by killing Alec, her hope of happiness with Angel is cut short.
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As one examines the current popular movies today, and many of them contain scenes of extended violence.
Take out the "and" because it doesn't make sense, that's all.
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Violence is obviously for the sake of violence
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Unless it's my violent tendencies taking over
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Hardy uses violence in his novel in order to enhance the story and make in (it) more believable.
However, a (the) reader realizes that Tess does not love Alec...
This aversion Tess holds towards (Tess's aversion to) Alec leaves her available to marry Angel--I'm not sure, but I think that might sound more correct...I keep thinking of your "aversion to stickers" ^__^
During and after the rape, Tess’s mental condition deteriorated. While she could still function, there is obvious differences between her and the people she knows. This change in her thoughts and personality were both what attracted Angel to her, and what gave her the ability to commit murder. However, after Angel finds out that she is not ‘pure’, she is unfairly punished for what Alec did to her. Thus, Alec’s raping of Tess was important to the novel because it set up openings through which Hardy could continue his story. This whole section just needs to be put in present tense. The sentence before ( ... )
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it's in my lj.
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One of the first violent scenes Hardy includes is the one in which Tess is raped by Alec D’urberville. Say "in which Alec D'Urberville rapes Tess" to make it stronger, or pro active, or something. Grammar check for word says that all the time.
...there is obvious differences between her and the people she knows. Should be "are" instead of "is". Refers to "differences"
Another, smaller violent scene was when Tess slapped Alec with her glove. I don’t like "Another, smaller violent scene..." It could be “Another less violent scene”. At least take out the comma; I think that would be better.
The fact that Tess slapped Alex Shouldn't it be Alec?
Yes, that sentence makes sense
Tess does not seem to realize- or, if she does realize, she does not care- that by killing Alec, her hope of happiness with Angel is cut short. ( ... )
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