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[hottbrownsugar]

I had to write these crazy poem with insane contraints (too many to list) but it would be cool if you guys read my first 4 poems so that when i go to rewrite them (i won't have to follow the contraints anymore) i will have feed back from people whoes opinions i respect. You don't have to read all or any to be honest but it would be cool if you

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[viva_la_boheme]

Since I should be doing my own homework...im obviously reading lj.

I like the 4th one the best, i think. I don't like how the first one has the rhyming 'aquamarine' thrown in there, since it seems to be the only rhyme in there that pops out at you.

[hottbrownsugar]

yeah the first one was one of the crazy contraint poems my crazy asian teacher gave us. All the end word were required so toss, albatross, machine and aquamarine had to be the end of those lines. same for the rest of the stanza's. (crazy i know) plus the lines had to be 9-13 syllables long and we had to include three non-primary colors, name of an actress who dies before 1980. and something else i can't remember.

The last one i wrote right before i posted and i think it turned out alright. all he gave us was was a paragraph of non-cohesive lines and said to right something not rhymed and not abstract about it. some of the fragmented lines included walking penguins, empty sky, convention of beehives, jackals and jasmin, clowns and capers.

And as crazy as he seems his methods help me write thing i would have never thought ot have written.