Comments | hp_remix: <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/voldiespet">voldiespet</a></strong> & <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/nimori">nimori</a></strong>

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voldiespet & nimori

Aug 17, 2004 00:09

Author: voldiespet
Title: Nothing to be Done
Pairing: Voldemort/James
Challenge: Having nothing, nothing can he lose"- (Act III Scene III) - King Henry the Sixth Part III

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Comments 6

fluffyllama August 16 2004, 07:45:18 UTC

Mmm, that is amazing. All the innocent sounds and smells are so claustrophic and menacing, you get a real impression of them living in fear, and you have such a feeling of unease throughout. I love the little details like Harry apparently being sensitive to Voldemort already, and the way he gets hold of Dumbledore's beard.

And I didn't say it, but you can't have too much Sirius *g*

nimori August 16 2004, 08:12:44 UTC

Too... too much Sirius? *faints in shock at the existence of such a thing*

Thanks. :) I had fun with all the metaphor in this one, though on re-reading I think I was a tad heavy-handed at the beginning. I think Harry's sensitivity had more to do with him sensing the influence on James than any previous connection to Voldemort -- though I've always thought Lily can't have been the first person to die for a family member with the killing curse, so I think there is something there.

fluffyllama August 16 2004, 08:20:20 UTC

Yes, I think I expressed it badly. Harry's reaction to James was interesting because the reader knows of the later Voldemort sensitivity. It's a nice memorable touch.

shimmery017 August 16 2004, 08:40:21 UTC

Oh, wonderful! I especially loved the final scene, James looking at Sirius and choosing Peter as more disposable. The feeling of persecution was also very well done. Great fic! :-)

snapetoy August 17 2004, 00:47:16 UTC

Nim, I really loved this - the sense of fear and unease that pervades it, the way Harry reacts to James. I love the tension in it, the fear within the everyday household setting, and the sense of distancing within, of James trying to hide what's happening to him.

And I just love the way you snuck Sirius in there! And then made James choose him over Peter, and I suspect you made him choose Sirius over Lily and Harry as well, to keep him safe.

amanuensis1 August 17 2004, 03:41:48 UTC

Whimper. From the non-verb clause the weight of a thick afghan thief to his breath that said more than any verb, you had me. God, I can imagine that James's last days felt exactly like that.

*am total sucker for toddler Harry*