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hpfanme

chapter 1

Sep 20, 2007 20:55

Chapter 1

Chapter 1-Frozen Soda

"I'm driving!" I called, running down the stairs. I ran past my older brother, grabbed the keys from his hand and ran outside. In the almost year I've had my liscense, my driving still terrifies him.

"Fine!" he shouted after me, "But I get to choose the SODA!"

Mom was already in bed, so we were on our way to Wal Mart ( Read more... )

Comments 6

danie_v September 29 2007, 19:14:15 UTC

Very very interesting
i like it!!
freezing your brother sounds... fun
(:
cant wait for the next chapter!!

hpfanme September 30 2007, 02:04:06 UTC

thank you!!! you gave me the inspiration to go finish the second chapter!! YAY!!

anonymous September 30 2007, 20:22:30 UTC

OMG I LUV IT THERE'S NO WAY YOU WROTE THAT ITS SO GOOD I LAUGH AT THE PART I WAS IN YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE I NEED TO KNOWWHAT HAPPENS NEXT

hpfanme September 30 2007, 20:58:16 UTC

Thanks Al. You should laugh at the part you were in--it's basically you.
Glad you like it chica!! LADIES AND GENTLEMEN!!! THE INSPIRATION FOR EMILY'S BEST FRIEND ALLYSON!!! I PRESENT-MY BEST FRIEND ALLYSON!!!

anonymous October 5 2007, 00:23:36 UTC

This was very well written. I like that you started your story imeadias reis( I do not know how to spell that). Meaning that you started in the middle of something and then go back to explain how you got there later like in flashbacks.

Gabby

hpfanme October 5 2007, 00:31:15 UTC

thanks!!!