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[stryfechild]

okay here it is, I apologize for any spelling or grammer errors as it is unbetaed and was partially written around 1:30am. I'm not real happy with it and I'm sorry for where I ended the chapter I just couldn't think of anything else to write.

Comments

Nice Job

[goldpemcorgi]

I know how you feel. There's nothing like confusion to move a story along and give the characters a headache of monumental proportions. Don't worry about where you left it... It's a good enough opening for me.

Corgi

Re: Nice Job

[stryfechild]

thank you, I was worried about that.

[_ataraxis_]

I like the use of dialogue and action in this piece. Definitely sets more of the tone for the two characters.

[stryfechild]

thanks so much

[magdelena1969]

I think you did a fantastic job. Showing Severus having such difficulty at first, even with the aid of the snake is a great way to go.

[stryfechild]

thank you, for me at least it made sense that he would have to get use to the odd angles and what not from using the sight of another creature.

[amandasaitou]

It's good to see that Snape still is so much in character, I'm very pleased with this chapter and I think you did a pretty good job! Just made things easier to next writer, I suppose!

Amanda