Corgi, it's briliant what you've done with the messed pieces of last chapter that I'd left behind.. My favorite scene for sure is their first time in their proper ages, and the torture scene... yeah, it sounds cruel, but I really believe Severus would do that if necessary, in the real story. Sorry for the long absence, TDH is almost ready to go, but I've just faced some troublesome time with computers both at home and work... trying to fix it as fast as I can..
"I know it's not your fault. I've been aware since your first years that your relatives refused to spend money on you." Previous chapter stated Snape thought Harry had been raised spoiled and pampered.
My father used every penny we had to support the Dark Lord. We had nothing because of him." Previous chapter stated Snape's father told him to break up w/Stephen for following the Dark Lord.
the two Aurors guarding the blonde where were they & how did Severus get past them when he left fully visible?
breach the subject should be "broach"
made no bones about his fate if her Harry was hurt by him *snirk*
The paragraph where DD announces Harry will be staying w/the Dursley's & Molly vehemently disagreeing was excellent.
"Severus! What did you do?" Bwahahahaha! Busted.
Very good at the descriptive. Watch spelling & grammar.
Re: Age is Just a WordgoldpemcorgiJune 23 2008, 22:07:16 UTC
I'm still plugging away at the story. There's only two chapters to go so hopefully I can get my muse back in line to finish. I just don't know when It'll be done.
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Sorry for the long absence, TDH is almost ready to go, but I've just faced some troublesome time with computers both at home and work... trying to fix it as fast as I can..
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Amanda :)
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Continuity errors:
"I know it's not your fault. I've been aware since your first years that your relatives refused to spend money on you."
Previous chapter stated Snape thought Harry had been raised spoiled and pampered.
My father used every penny we had to support the Dark Lord. We had nothing because of him."
Previous chapter stated Snape's father told him to break up w/Stephen for following the Dark Lord.
the two Aurors guarding the blonde
where were they & how did Severus get past them when he left fully visible?
breach the subject should be "broach"
made no bones about his fate if her Harry was hurt by him
*snirk*
The paragraph where DD announces Harry will be staying w/the Dursley's & Molly vehemently disagreeing was excellent.
"Severus! What did you do?"
Bwahahahaha! Busted.
Very good at the descriptive. Watch spelling & grammar.
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