Comments | hpslashnotsmut: FIC: Moth to a Flame for <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/chimbomba">chimbomba</a></strong>

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FIC: Moth to a Flame for chimbomba

Apr 02, 2009 21:47

Title: Moth to a Flame
Author: "lj user="kcstories">
Giftee: chimbomba
Character/Pairing: Bellatrix/Alice
Rating: PG
Word Count: 4,517
Summary: A new, unexpected friendship sends Alice down a path she never would have walked alone.
Warnings: Liberties were taken with canon characters (Alice is a Hufflepuff, for instance) and timelines. Some dark-ish subject ( Read more... )

femmeslash, round 5, bellatrix/alice, fic

Comments 8

snegurochka_lee April 3 2009, 15:04:22 UTC

I enjoyed that! I always like second person done well, and Bellatrix was so IC and creepy. :)

kcstories April 30 2009, 13:42:26 UTC

Thank you very much! :)

chimbomba April 3 2009, 17:15:29 UTC

“Whatever happens, I will never be anybody’s puppet.”
So chilling and ironic, considering what becomes of Bellatrix...

I love the second person as well - it works wonders with Alice's POV. And gosh, I really love your Alice and your Bellatrix, it's so creepy to see how their relationship plays out! Then Frank makes a cameo, which I find awesome, because I can see exactly what happens next without you saying it. And the end! The sense of intrigue and foreboding OH MY GOODNESS. ♥

I really love this, thank you SO much! :DD

kcstories April 30 2009, 13:50:10 UTC

Yay! I'm really happy you liked this so much. Thanks! It was a great prompt to work with. ♥

featherxquill April 4 2009, 04:37:32 UTC

Wow, this is brilliant. The second person is really interesting, and I love the way you've characterised Alice as a bit of a loner who's easily taken in by someone who pretends to care about her. Bellatrix, too, is wonderfully IC.

kcstories April 30 2009, 13:50:45 UTC

Thank you very much. :)

whatifisaidno April 10 2009, 06:24:16 UTC

A part of you feels shattered, like you’re not quite yourself anymore, not since you first noticed her noticing you.

Your description of Alice's crush is very believable and realistic and so familiar to most anyone, certainly myself. The foreshadowing adds another layer-- From Bellatrix's "independence" to the Basilisk and their future together. It's very creepy; relationships like this do happen all the time!

The second person POV, btw, was great and not awkward at all like it sometimes can be.

kcstories April 30 2009, 13:52:11 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that the 2nd person POV worked for you. :)