How's My Driving?

[revolves]

Here is the obligatory constructive criticism post for all my roleplay characters at luceti, witchesreign, fountainofcod, random memes, and everything in between! How am I doing on characterization, grammar, and continuity? Anything else? Don't hold back, although at least try to offer ways to improve on the negative. :)

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