Challenge #4, October 2009, Part 3

[celadon_55]

Title: Things that Go Bump in the Night
Author: Celadon
What: Magic Where: Graveyard
Genre: Hurt/Comfort, Horror
Rating: PG-13
Characters:Don, Colby
Minor appearances by: Robin, Alan, David, Nikki, Charlie, Amita

Summary: Sometimes the safest thing to do on Halloween is stay home and pass out candy. Happy Halloween.

Comments

[celadon_55]

Thank you. I'm glad it made sense. I wasn't sure.

[lilacs_roses]

OMG!! Ditto, Rinkle. Colby's reaction was intense too. Well done.

[celadon_55]

Thank you! Poor Colby!

[munchkinofdoom]

Ha! Am very amused by how Don ends every part unconscious. *veg*

Don's internal monologue as narration works really well.

[celadon_55]

I know, it is a scream! Should have done it for part 4 too!

[aleo_70]

Love the writing style here, Don's thoughts and struggle to make sense of everything.

Poor Colby, he has also had a real scare, perhaps not as intense but bad enough in its own way.

Grabowski seems to have come out of the whole thing surprisingly lightly, considering.

Enjoying this one a lot, despite the whole buried alive thing.

[celadon_55]

Thank you! That's a relief! I couldn't be sure it made sense to anyone but me!

The moral to this story is DON'T GO INTO A GRAVEYARD on HALLOWEEN!!!

Well. Colby was busy. Which means Grabowski got lucky. :)

Thank you. Writing the buried alive thing was cathartic. Reading it may not be.

[saphirablue]

Wonderful!

And, um, this here:

“In my professional experience, sir, a corpse does not vomit like that, so he’s alive,

made me me go *LOL* - sorry Don!

Great chapter and I love confused!shocky!protective!Colby! =)

Thank you!

[celadon_55]

Thank you. And a like a little humor to help with tension. :) Yeah - poor Colby had almost as bad a night as Don.