I DONT CARE HOW HARD THIS PART SUCKS BUT ANYWAY I'M POSTING IT!
Swap (1/...)
Patrick woke up in Pete’s bed, at Pete’s house; with Pete staring at him with an expressing of such caring that Patrick almost wanted to puke. He loved them, but sometimes Patrick couldn’t take looking into Pete sugar-coated puppy dog eyes. What he did like, though, was being next to Pete. He was a little uneasy at first because, hey, ( Read more... )
Patrick woke up in Pete’s bed, at Pete’s house; with Pete staring at him with an expressing of such caring that Patrick almost wanted to puke. He loved them, but sometimes Patrick couldn’t take looking into Pete sugar-coated puppy dog eyes. What he did like, though, was being next to Pete. He was a little uneasy at first because, hey, ( Read more... )
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Oh, just for easier readability, it's better to put some space between the paragraphs. Then, a reader's eyes can take a rest, you know?
or whatever the fuck chicks called them
Yes, Patrick. Chicks have funny names for everything!
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yeah i put that there because i can't spell lufa (or is it loofa?) argh!
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When Patrick has to pee... Oh GOD!!! Lol in rl!! I woke my roommate up!
If I was Pete, I would have jumped him/her ASAP! Lol. Talk about a win/win! Lol, but there is a part two, No?
Excited to see where you take this.
The Patrick/Ashlee swap is very interesting!
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YES. THANK YOU EVER SO. PART TWO AT LEASY BY TOMMOROW. OH AM I STILL IN CAPS. crap. anyway, *faintage*
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And, stop it, don't put yourself down! I like it. :) I agree with megyal though, it would be easier on the eyes if you put breaks in the paragraphs but aside from that, it's wonderful!
"As the hot water ran down his chest he realized being a girl and being turned on was so different from being a guy. For starters, it was much more antagonizing."
- Yes Patrick, 'antagonizing' is the best word to describe it, haha!
And, ooh! I smell in the not so far distance. Please don't mind my fucked up grammar in the previous sentence. But. I'm excited for the next part! :D Great idea, never heard of it before. :)
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omg
cieluna commented on my post! and it was a good comment! eee!
*show friends*
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*flails*
I LOVE YOU SO MUCH.
IT'S SO AWESOME!
I was looking at it in my inbox (because I lurk you) and I was skimmimng and I hadn't gotten the genderfuck part in my head yet, and then I got to the word "clit" and I was like, WTF, guys don't have clits.
So I clicked on it and started from the beginnning and I love it.
MOARRRRRRRR.
Nao.
p.s. slight typo in the beginning.
You wrote "his" instead of hip.
:]
Moar and *memssss*
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SO HARD!
I'N GOONA FIX THAT TYPO NOW1
thankyouthankyouthankyou!
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