Forever (Cause you're gone 4/4)

[hurtstoloveyou]

4. Loved

The first time Pete realized he was in love with Patrick, it was too late. Cause when you’re thinking of boning your best friend while saying your wedding vows, well, too bad. And it’s not like he didn’t expect it, expect to fall in love accidentally on purpose again, but he loved Ashlee so much. The girl, with red dyed hair and perfect

Comments

[eyerenderingfan]

I enjoyed reading this, but the ending...completely threw me off. haha! loved it though.

[hurtstoloveyou]

thanks :D it's great to know someone likes my stuff.

[eyerenderingfan]

Oh me? I'm just a lurker haha. I read everyone's stuff and only comment if I think it's worth it.

[hurtstoloveyou]

well thanks :D

[ribbonsonwrists]

don't think i'm tearing you apart here, cause i'm not, mmkay sweetness?

this was written pretty well, but i'd like it a lot more if it was one post or if they were linked at the bottom.

you should work with a beta for longer works, because it helps SO much. i have an amazing pair of betas that i owe my longlonglong writing to. they really help you define your style and help it make sense to others.

but posted as a long fic or linked would make it easier to read.

keep writing kiddo.

[hurtstoloveyou]

thanks i'm glad you read it and i'm always happy to recieve concrit! the next time i do write something big i'll definatley take you advice. again thanks! ♥