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Jan 23, 2005 17:05

I met a barfly last night while eating dinner alone at a local pub. She was around 60 years old, accompanied by an equally scruffy gentlemen. He bore the same peacefully accomplished smirk as she did. The burden of poverty stricken contentment they wore on their backs were as light as their faded sweaters. I kindly asked her to pass me an ( Read more... )

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clevercrayon January 24 2005, 05:29:57 UTC

I enjoyed it, really. You should post like this more often.

hussnfussn January 24 2005, 16:46:12 UTC

haha, I think I have just been reading too much lately, but thank you.

...... anonymous January 24 2005, 08:05:53 UTC

You.

Re: ...... hussnfussn January 24 2005, 16:46:21 UTC

you too?

cheekygremlin January 24 2005, 19:44:30 UTC

Hey! That was really well done. Did that really happen? Did she really say all that? Thats great if she did. And it seems so true. I agree, you really should write like that more often. Oh and since I'm in a creative writing editting mode can I offer one thing?
I was immediately welcomed into their meal on a stool. Sounds awkward. Like you've been invited to be eaten. Other than that I loved it. :)

hussnfussn January 24 2005, 20:14:39 UTC

why thank you kindly. truly. and yes, amazing enough, she did say all that. maybe not in those exact words cuz i was a little tipsy, but that was the biggest chunk of it.

tell you what creative writer, ill write more like that if you will.

thanks, good critique, i agree, my biggest problem with my writing is having an addiction to making every line profound on its own, when people dont act, think, or talk that way.

cheekygremlin January 24 2005, 21:26:09 UTC

tell you what creative writer, ill write more like that if you will.

Done.