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It was on a normal school morning in late 1999, I was 12 years old and in 6th grade. I woke up when my ANNOYING alarm clock went off. After that, I went and took my shower. When I got back to my room I started to get dressed and noticed that the shirt I was going to wear, a souvenir shirt from Alaska my grandma got me, was as wrinkled as a 103 year
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This is really clever! I absolutely love your two metaphors: 1) as wrinkled as a 103-year old armpit" and 2) 6th graders know as much about 2nd degree burns as Trekkies know about dating. Very funny indeed!
What drives this story is the "voice". It's witty, funny and a bit sarcastic (which I liked). You do a nice job hooking the reader and getting us interested in your story through your humour. This is a great example of how voice can be the driving force in an essay or story even if the content isn't particularly engaging.
Good work!
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