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Aug 11, 2004 15:38

Well here is a little something that could very well become a big something if I get some feedback ( Read more... )

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deadsick August 13 2004, 18:22:21 UTC
Kekeke...Go Zoro. Looks like he's got it in the bag. The only suggestions I have are to possibly describe the village a bit more, and to look at some sentence structures.

(Tell me more about the village for another sentence or two. Are the people nice, women curvy? Were the crew welcomed when they landed? Mildly tolerated? Is there snow in the village or is it surrounded by green, lush pastures? Stuff like that...)

Anyway?! Yellow eyes?! ACK! Who or what is it?! You must continue!!!

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Its a bit of a spoiler. hyperactivator August 14 2004, 07:39:07 UTC
I'll just say that the char. and zoro have a bit of a past together.

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deadsick September 20 2004, 15:49:05 UTC
HELLO! *waves*

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Hello Dead-person! ^_^ hyperactivator September 21 2004, 09:19:36 UTC
Long time no type. ^_^ How you doing? Did you order from that website?

Have you done anymore Tracking the fox?

There seems to be a short suply of good Gaara x Naruto ('cept for Cneko the latest Family of demons stories rock!)

Dad and I went on another driveing lesson yesterday and I should be geting my learner's permit soon. We also went to see an old abandoned civil war fort. I fell down in the hole and hurt myself :( .

I haven't bought my desktop yet but by next month I will definitly have the cash I need. ;)

As for my job prospects........I broak the Walmart hireing center.

Poo.

oh well.

Have you read Shirohane's latest?

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Re: Hello Dead-person! ^_^ deadsick September 21 2004, 13:43:35 UTC
For the last week I haven't been able to do much at all. I'm a sad sad Floridian and thus had no power in which to order items. I'll probably try to grab a DVD when I can scrap together some money.

Would you mind being my beta-type thingy? I have the first part of the next chapter done but I look it over again and again and go "I should change this and that..." and as such don't get anywhere...-_-;;; I think I need someone else to tell me if it looks okay so I can stop worrying. I did type on it last night though. I usually update at five pages and right now I have about 4 1/2 (still has to look at the second part and edit though...). Bleh.

If I were to ork anywhere I think I'd do it in a bookstore or Blockbuster.

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Re: Hello Dead-person! ^_^ hyperactivator September 22 2004, 08:00:02 UTC
I will gladly beta your story...but not for spelling or grammer just content.

(I wouldn't wish my spelling on anyone:( )

As for a job...well beggers can't be choosers and the new supercenter opening apears to be my best bet.

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