Rhythm
Ut cachinnis dissolvatur torqueatur rictibus
Всем полопаться от смеха, скорчиться от хохота
Kahkahalarla gülünsün, gülmekten katılınsın
May we all collapse in laughter, giggling uncontrollably
The first one is a medieval Latin phrase from "Coena Cypriani" quoted by Umberto Eco in Il Nome Della Rosa.
Video ridere certe quem scurra Crescentius,
Ut cachinnis dissolvatur, torqueatur rictibus;
Sed prius pedens crepabit tussiendo vetulus,
Quam regat linguam contemptus prior balbus omnibus.
http://books.google.com/books?id=WPlLl1PNegQC
The second one is a great Russian translation by Elena Kostyukovich.
The third one is a Turkish translation that is great phonetically. It may have followed the original rhythm, but Turkish stressing is very difficult to my ears, so I do not know for sure. See the "Olympus" (uludağ) dictionary http://www.uludagsozluk.com/
The fourth one is an attempt to gain in rhythm while losing in style from "Let him be convulsed with laughter, let him be twisted into a gaping grin!"
I could find a lot of translations that I think do not keep the rhythm, such as:
„Да се скъса от прекален смях, да криви в смях устата си!“ (Bulgarian)
"che si dissolva con le risate, che gli angoli della bocca si torcano" (Italian)
I think the verse rhythm is more important than its meaning, style, vocabulary or even rhyme.
Are there any other rhythmical translations?
Всем полопаться от смеха, скорчиться от хохота
Kahkahalarla gülünsün, gülmekten katılınsın
May we all collapse in laughter, giggling uncontrollably
The first one is a medieval Latin phrase from "Coena Cypriani" quoted by Umberto Eco in Il Nome Della Rosa.
Video ridere certe quem scurra Crescentius,
Ut cachinnis dissolvatur, torqueatur rictibus;
Sed prius pedens crepabit tussiendo vetulus,
Quam regat linguam contemptus prior balbus omnibus.
http://books.google.com/books?id=WPlLl1PNegQC
The second one is a great Russian translation by Elena Kostyukovich.
The third one is a Turkish translation that is great phonetically. It may have followed the original rhythm, but Turkish stressing is very difficult to my ears, so I do not know for sure. See the "Olympus" (uludağ) dictionary http://www.uludagsozluk.com/
The fourth one is an attempt to gain in rhythm while losing in style from "Let him be convulsed with laughter, let him be twisted into a gaping grin!"
I could find a lot of translations that I think do not keep the rhythm, such as:
„Да се скъса от прекален смях, да криви в смях устата си!“ (Bulgarian)
"che si dissolva con le risate, che gli angoli della bocca si torcano" (Italian)
I think the verse rhythm is more important than its meaning, style, vocabulary or even rhyme.
Are there any other rhythmical translations?