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waltzmatildah August 3 2014, 14:13:17 UTC
Very nicely done. There are some laugh out loud moments here (for example: "Jesus Christ, Pete!" snapped the dark priest. "It doesn't work unless all of us say all our lines!"), and I especially loved your ending :)

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i_17bingo August 5 2014, 11:28:17 UTC
Dark Priests are people too, you know.

True story: I actually knew one. He was a douche.

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bleodswean August 3 2014, 15:53:27 UTC
This is really fantastic! Fun as is your forte but also snappy and fast and tightly written! The bingo idea is brill - is this something you add to?

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i_17bingo August 4 2014, 06:39:28 UTC
Is the bingo thing something I add to?

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bleodswean August 4 2014, 14:14:18 UTC
Meaning, is this your canon? Your world? What else does it encompass and is this the character you write long for? The fact that her winning bingo number is your username...are all the winning bingo numbers i-17? Is there a point to the bingo cards?

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i_17bingo August 4 2014, 15:49:36 UTC
Yes, it is my canon, and my world. With the exception of Week 1, this season has been devoted to expanding a universe I'd like to write a novel within. It goes all the way back to the 1940s to modern day, and is on the verge of crossing over into itself soon (Moreso than it has already--for example, the Victor in " Build a Better Mousetrap" is the same Victor who arrives in " Yes, And", separated by about a dozen years.)

Because I crosspost to my Wordpress blog, tags will take you there.

The bingo card is a coincidence--I love Evil Villain Cliches as much as Rafaela, but I also love to make fun of them--and I just took the opportunity for some high-quality narcissism.

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lapis_lazuli615 August 3 2014, 19:01:50 UTC
ROTFL! I am totally digging this character!

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i_17bingo August 5 2014, 11:49:55 UTC
Yeah, she's kind of irresistible.

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agirlnamedluna August 3 2014, 19:27:24 UTC
Aw very clever! I really like Rafaela's no nonsense attitude, I can see her eyerolling all the way through :D

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i_17bingo August 7 2014, 13:22:30 UTC
I don't know if I'd call it eye-rolling. She gets a bit of a kick out of the finer details of her job, even as she vanquishes some of those same details.

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penpusher August 3 2014, 21:37:15 UTC
Way to give yourself a cameo, haha. I'm all about the powerful women. Nice going!

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i_17bingo August 5 2014, 06:34:03 UTC
I couldn't help myself with the cameo. Once bingo came up...

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