LJ Idol, Season 9, Week 17: Scare Quotes

[i_17bingo]

Comments

[theun4givables]

Oh, lord. Jason really shouldn't try to disprove something exists. The chaos is represented really well, here. :)

[i_17bingo]

I love chaos. It's so chaotic.

[bleodswean]

You have so much exposition and action going on in your dialogue - it's quite a ride! I got lost for a few lines when you introduced Jason by name and definition....but I caught back up. I like the idea of a debunker who thus far hasn't been able to debunk anything.

[i_17bingo]

But he tries so hard!

[tsuki_no_bara]

the dialogue in this is THE BEST. "that's dave." "he doesn't even." heee! and i love the idea of a paranormal debunker who hasn't debunked a damn thing.

[i_17bingo]

Well, Dave's inability to even is really his most noteworthy feature.

[deidrewilliams]

I've missed several weeks of entries so I only recognise one of these character names, but I like how it stands alone so that doesn't matter. It's a pretty interesting world you've created. I kinda wanted to read the long version from Rafaela, though! She's a cool character.

[i_17bingo]

Rafaela's becoming a regular, which is kind of a surprise to me, to be honest.

[anyonesghost]

Excellently done. (Although, I admit it: I side with Dave on this one. ;-) )

[i_17bingo]

How can you even in his situation?