Fic: Sigh No More

[i_am_davnee]

Title:  Sigh No More
Author:  Davnee
Rating:  K+
Summary:  My expanded take on the "rack scene" from the end of Taking A Break From All Your Worries (Season 3).  I'd call this a ficlet, except it is just over 1,000 words.  Apologies to Shakespeare for the title and very special thanks to the as always magnificent unavitasegreta  for her help.

Comments

[pandj1958]

Its all perfect but i'm definitely going to add to the flail over the last sentence. Just...guh.

I always thought that something would have had to have been revealed to Bill for him to offer to have Baltar just disapear and this fits in so well with that. If he found out that Laura had been harmed in any way it would provoke a previously unseen willingness to just be rid of him. I love this take on the scene.

[i_am_davnee]

Thanks! I always wondered if they ever talked directly about what happened to her on New Caprica, so I decided to write it in as a justification for Bill's offer, which like you said calls out for an explanation. And thanks for flailing over the last line! :)

[zaleti]

arm’s length was the cruelest distance he’d ever known
I do love that line. I'm rather fond of tortured!Bill, even though I sometimes want to hit him. :)
Also, his thoughts on Laura being in his quarters, and the affection that you've placed underneath the discussion, are wonderful.

[i_am_davnee]

Tortured!Bill took a long time to just go ahead and be with the woman he loved now didn't he? But I love him anyway! And I wanted to give a more serious treatment to the responsibilities moment in A Day in the Life, show that wanting her but knowing he couldn't have her had been weighing on him for a long time.

Thanks for commenting!

[laet_v]

"As he stood and walked away, he realized that arm’s length was the cruelest distance he’d ever known."

Wow!!!!

Nice extended scene, sound very true. I love the insight in Bill's mind.... an the deep caring between them.

Your last sentence..........PERFECT!

thank you

[i_am_davnee]

Thanks! I was a little worried that the last sentence might be too melodramatic, but it seems to have worked nicely for the readers. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic and thought it brought something extra to the scene. I was hoping people would find some added value in this. :)

[pennyfeline]

You have such a beautiful way of writing, and so much in character. I don't usually read a lot of fanfic, but your stories are an exception I love to make whenever I happen to spot one on my flist.

[i_am_davnee]

Why thank you! That's so sweet of you to say. I try to keep these two in character, because really they are so wonderful who'd want to change them! So I'm glad to know that you think I manage it most of the time. :)

[missbevcrusher]

Well done. This story fits the scene so well. I love your insight into the characters. Bravo.

[i_am_davnee]

Thank you! I'm glad you thought the story did justice to the scene and characters. I wanted for it to be believable. :)

[missbevcrusher]

Well if you wanted it believable, mission accomplished. I know I'd be damned proud if I ever wrote something like this. *applause*

[i_am_davnee]

*blushes* Thank you. Truly. To me, in character and in canon are the highest possible compliments.