I think it's good. The ending is a bit weak though. Ending with the word "him" isn't very affective. try adding one more sentence with Andromache doing something else...but not cliche like crying. but I don't think you need to analyze or whatever anymore..it's really good...seeing yours and dan's poem made me feel like mine sucks way more than anyone elses..so i rewrote mine lol.
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The ending is a bit weak though. Ending with the word "him" isn't very affective. try adding one more sentence with Andromache doing something else...but not cliche like crying.
but I don't think you need to analyze or whatever anymore..it's really good...seeing yours and dan's poem made me feel like mine sucks way more than anyone elses..so i rewrote mine lol.
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