As Yet Untitled

[i_miss_sleeping]

DEAR EVERYONE:

This is an as-yet untitled draft of something I'm working on. It needs work--a lot of work. The last scene is especially awful. I put it up because I'm a whore for feedback? Sort of? Maybe? Yes. I hope all is well out there on the internets. And remember not to sleep with that hooker like I told you. Just last night I saw her doing

Comments

[fearless_em]

Moonshine? It's a misdemeanor, technically.
Beer and wine are totally legal. Moonshine, to my understanding, is only illegal because it's dangerous. Risk of explosion, and all that.

Your play looks nice.

[dirrtisouth]

I mean, moonshine is illegal... but only if you advertise it like, "hey popo! i got moonshine and i'm getting FUCKED UP WOOOO!" so i say go for it. and call me when you make it. you can't drink moonshine without the token southerner. THAT is "rape party in cell block 6" illegal.

good for you for getting a mac :) i just got one myself. i make sweet love to it every day.

[anonymous]

Thanks for the commentary! I'll think about all of the above :)

Funny, In a test audience of 15 people on a cold read, the majority of them said the chorus was their favorite part. Hmmm, It needs streamlining, this whole rigamarole. It's a little bloated and unbalanced at the moment.

El mamut le dio...

[i_miss_sleeping]

"I have the bad habit of starting things having no idea how they´re going to end."

You're wrong in calling that a bad habit, its living with the work and its how I like to write myself. I think I need to step back and let this one sit for a while, and come back to it a few weeks or months down the road. Gotta get back to that point where I can read it for the first time again and nail what's wrong with it.

I miss you dear, when will I be graced with your presence once more?

(P.S. Hangover city, population: Pawel right now. Goddammit, I need to not like wine so much)