Week 2

[iamapremo]

The bus overshot his stop by orders of the police and firemen buzzing around a two-block area with their flashing lights, so Merlin has to walk an extra four blocks and approach the deep freeze from the rear. A temporary card-carrying member of the tucked away black market freezer on the South side, he needs respite after a full-day on the roof of

Comments

[i_will_not_say]

Ooh, I'm really enjoying this world you've created. ^_^

[iamapremo]

Thanks! I'm liking it too. World building is fun.

[kecharasmoon]

Nicely done! There are a couple of tense issues you might want to check on though.

[iamapremo]

Great catch! right there in the first sentence is one. Thanks!

[iamapremo]

Thanks!

[i_17bingo]

The idea of air conditioning as a precious commodity is one that gets under my skin and is kind of scary. Realistic, but scary...

[iamapremo]

I vaguely remember the energy crisis in the '70s...

[cheshire23]

Logical extension. Reminds me a bit of Doris Lessing's Memoirs of a Survivor.

[basric]

Nice story. I enjoyed it.

[iamapremo]

Thanks! My goal is to add to it every week. Should be very fun if I can stay in the competition.