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ianam1983

Never Did Run Smooth, Ch. 18

Jul 13, 2009 00:44

Violent chapter is violent. Just to warn ya. Pretty much two mechs beating the slag out of each other and insulting each other throughout... and no, not in the fun way. (Actually, that might depend on who you are.)

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slash, oh the drama, rattrap, megatron, dinobot

Comments 15

jill_dragon July 22 2009, 06:46:56 UTC

Wow, that was quite the battle! I found it every bit as brutal and gut-wrenching as the one in Code of Hero. The bit of backstory on Dinobot and Megatron was also very interesting and it would be great to see some more.

One small note, a sword 'handle' is generally refered to as a hilt. :)

Can't wait for the next chapter.

ianam1983 July 22 2009, 15:22:38 UTC

Yeah, there'll be more of that. This was just their introduction to each other. (Well, at least Dinobot's introduction to Megatron. Ol' Megs had been following him for some time.)

Well originally I had used "hilt" in a previous paragraph, so this was an example of using a thesaurus to not seem too repetitive. Same word over and over in a couple of paragraphs makes ianam cry. But that got edited out, so you're right, hilt works better there now. Fixed it. (Gotta love LJ for quick 'n easy edits. The Pit, not so much.)

Thanks for the quick review! I'll get right on it. Next chapter follows the pod and Primal's attempt to reclaim it.

raisedbymoogles July 23 2009, 02:09:17 UTC

That is hardcore. Excellent fight scene!

mmouse15 July 23 2009, 03:06:59 UTC

So good to see you back again! That was an excellent pair of fight scenes (the flashback was superb), and the hatred between them was palpable. Wonderful read this time around (and a heck of a cliffhanger!).

catc10 July 25 2009, 20:45:12 UTC

GAHHH!!! *grumbling mess of curses and screams*
OMG!!!!
*foaming mouth*
ME

ianam1983 July 25 2009, 22:17:47 UTC

... Was that good or bad? :P

catc10 July 26 2009, 03:09:11 UTC

GOOD.
SO GOOD!!!
*glee and squee face*
ME

ianam1983 July 26 2009, 04:20:08 UTC

Yay! XD *Squees back, just for the hell of it*

As promised, review when I can come up with something that ain't I HATE TIGATRON ARGH akisawana July 26 2009, 21:11:28 UTC

FIRST OFF, I AM GENERALLY A FAN OF BAD THINGS HAPPENING TO THIS PARTICULAR INCARNATION OF MEGATRON. THE REAL MEGATRON LOOKS UPON HIM FROM AFAR, WEEPS, AND ASKS “WHO THE FUCK PUT MOTORMASTER IN CHARGE?”

And of course Dinobot takes better care of his sword. It’s not like it’s got self-repair systems like he does.

Also, Megatron is a sneaky bastard who will promise you the moon and then give you rotten cheese.

Dinobot is predictable. It comes from being so goddamn honorable. Very little room for creativity there.

Also, Megatron is a bastard. In related news, Slingshot is a dick and water is wet.

I do not actually recall Dinobot being betrayed by Megatron. I mean, there’s a laundry list of Things Megatron Has Done To Dinobot. And it’s really big. I might be forgetting some things. And I have a narrow definition of betrayal, which doesn’t cover being fucking stupid.

That said, Dinobot does not look upon betrayers with fondness.

"You couldn't even land on the right planet!"
The irony. I choke. I laugh. You owe me Coke ( ... )

Re: As promised, review when I can come up with something that ain't I HATE TIGATRON ARGH ianam1983 July 26 2009, 22:43:47 UTC

Your reviews terrify and excite me, woman. XD Why you got so many questions? Fine, it helps to flesh out the story anyway ( ... )